Comments : Wishing you well...

  • 18 years ago

    by -Ghostship Fidelity-

    I do like it very much. The only thing I would do is cut down on using the world I so much. It fit well in the first stanza but you should try to get some of them out in the other stanza's (not all of them though, just a few). Very good, ^_^

    Keep up the good work,
    Tony

  • 18 years ago

    by unstated affinity

    Wow.. j lau.. i have read several of your poems in the contest.. all are well writen.. i like this one the most,becos i can relate it to my feeling.. keep your good job.. take care.. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by ♥Leah♥

    This made me cry. :'( this was beautiful. it reminds me of a certain time in my life. let me kkow if u care to hear the story. 5/5. great job.

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw..It sounds like the person she was dating, she broke up with him, And The other guy was there to comfort her. Anywho, Great poem, Loved it 5/5

    - natz x0x

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw that's sweet. I really liked it. Keep up the good work =]

    - natz x0x

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Thats a really unique style - loving the structure of the poem - keep it up :)

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Awesome job. I loved it. The Flow and structure of the Poem is wonderfully put together.

  • 17 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Sad and sweet, nice work

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Very sweet and very sad.. good job on that! nice structure and a nice poem! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Aww so sad, yet so sweet. I love poems like that!! I really have nothing to say about this one except you did a great job!

    Cayce x

  • 17 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    Well writen, full of emotion.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Beautifully written. You put a lot of emotion into this, amazing job. I loved this part the best:

    Far away from this lonely place,
    Across the ocean where I will gaze.
    How I wish that you will stay,
    But wishing you well is all I pray.
    When you come back healed and well,
    Please don't forget this lonely heart,

    Great rhyming, the beginning really sucked me in.

    Excellent.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    The stanzas were a little unorganized, but other then that it was great. *5/5*

    Alyson

    P.S.
    Keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by melly xx

    This is a very sad yet beautiful poem. I know these feelings very well. it is so hard to carry on without love. The emptiness of your heart and soul can be felt in everyword.
    Great job! 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is my favorite of yours so far. I think that your opening lines were powerful and let me know kind of what to expect from your poem. It was very well put together, and it told such a sad and sweet story at the same time. wonderful job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Awww!!
    Please don't forget this lonely heart,
    Who wished you well
    From the bottom of his heart.
    they were the lines that really got me, that was sweet. i can almost feel your yearning. chin up

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    This is a very nice piece, I am falling in love with all of your poetry! You used a great free-verse style, and it flowed very nicely. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    I liked this peice. it was very sad yet comforting and full of happiness at the same time, if that makes any sence to you. The only thing I wasnt a big fan of was the rhyme scheme seemed to change now and again throughout the poem and it was kind of odd sounding. The last two lines were my favorite for the completely summed up the poem. nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Awww sooo sweet.... I loved the good choices of words becasue it showed that you had a really good creative side of you and I hope you never stop writing.... because that is what makes u... good job and keep u p the good work