I love this, beautifully written! Awesome job!

Very well done. The pace and intensity lent itself well to the subject matter.

Hot damn......... erotic but in a passionate and sensual way. Beautiful write..... love it

Ooohh Amanda! You bad girl! lol This is awesome! I think writing on such a topic and not being afraid to share it is truly an accomplishment because I've written a couple and have been too scared to post or share with ANYONE in fear people wouldn't like them...so I commend you for that...double for doing it and doing it well...LoL Very nice write!!! I absolutely loved it!

I do have ONE TINY little suggestion. As I was reading I stumbled on this line "Slowly reaching my depths" only because it seemed like it was missing a syllable or something. So maybe adding ONE word in front of depths...like sacred or something like that. I don't know...just a thought!

I LOVED the poem....you're writing is truly amazing and I love seeing how much you've changed in every piece since I first started reading your beautiful writing.

Do take care of yourself and you'll surely hear more from me!! LOL

Nice

Well done

I'm impressed.. this made me actually deel the moment.... lovely

Well done, a great poem

Hey this is awesome

Wonderful write Amanda, exquisite!!!

Amanda Bee!!! Wow, just amazing. I never knew you would have a poem like that in you. Just great.

Amanda Bee!!! Wow, just amazing. I never knew you would have a poem like that in you. Just great.

Amanda Bee!!! Wow, just amazing. I never knew you would have a poem like that in you. Just great.

Amanda Bee!!! Wow, just amazing. I never knew you would have a poem like that in you. Just great.

Sorry, I didn't mean to write it four times, the server wasn't loading correctly. But anyway, nice poem again.

Very nice, especially the second stanza. Written so passionately, truly awesome.
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Wow and I thought I could write erotic poetry my hat is off to you the new queen of steam. I loved this and will be back to read more, thanx for the experience.
Tim

Hot and poetic - i like the talent with which you combine the two. Also the slight changes in rhythm keep it interesting. nice work :)

Very nicely written, the flow is so easily followed, and the dance is performed with perfection. keep up the good work Harry

That was a awesome poem!
great visual!
5/5