Comments : Emotionally Weird

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephy

    Well said. beautifully expressed.good job-xxx-

  • 18 years ago

    by holly

    Well done that was expressed well
    i liked the rhyme effect.
    good work keep it up
    xxALLYxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    Hmm. Good effort, but I think your rhyming interferes with your actual content. Personally, I don't think it's long enough, but I can see your angle. Just seems like it needs improving on.
    However, I do like this line:
    "That you're being emotionally raped.
    By her and her circles,"
    'Circles' is a general comment, leaving the reader open to interpretation. I like writing where everybody can feel they relate, even if indirectly so.
    I think you could work harder and make it something special.x

  • 18 years ago

    by Fighter (Ariane L.)

    Wow.... absolutely amazing!! i really hope you're all right. stay strong and take care,
    -xXx-

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This poem was very good. very well written. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    This poem was real because it was like I was reading you talking or reading inside your mind. It was an insite into you as a person. The only thing I would say is that at the beginning the poem is rhyming but is was really forced and soon after you dropped the rhyming all together. I would recomend that you go back and change the rhyming part and add stronger words that will bring your meaning out instead of just rhyme. I am not trying to be offensive so please don't take in that way, because it is just some advice.

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 18 years ago

    by Sondos

    A highly original topic once again and the words you use are so true. I find your way of righting fresh, interesting and creative Keep It Up
    All the Best
    Sondos

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    Wow this is amazing i love it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Minkus

    Very true; good things don't always happen to good people. 5/5.