Whoa that is really, really good!! It had the most awesome flow and it made PERFECT sense!! AWESOME definately 5/5 welcome to my favorites list!!
-Rachel

WOW i liked that poem..it kinda sounds like one of mine..its really good...JOc

I loved it, keep it up. u r now on my favs

Wow this was really good. 5/5

Mallori

You're a very talented writer and although its sad, I can see you've put alot of feelings into it and I think that's what makes this poem unique. Terrific job, God Bless. Bye!

This Is Only The 2nd Poem I've Read Of Yours And You've Made It Onto My Favs. You Have Amazing Talent And All Your Work Shows True Emotion.... You're Very Talented :)

x0x LoveLustTragedy x0x

Ok, very brutal sounding. Lol. Great job with this one. Excellent flow and the imagery was just perfect! :) 5/5 Keep it up!

Stephanie

Wow! Very... I don't know how to word this, but this was a great poem. :]

Another great poem by you, you are a talented poet. 5/5

Wow, sweetie you okay? This was really powerful. The emotion was raw and effective. Your words assisted this. The flow was great and allowed you to read the poem easily. Very nicely done 5/5

The rhymes and flow were good in this poem, but the topic is somewhat, unoriginal. I think this poem sort of lacks a bit of detail. You could try adding some adjectives to give it a little spice.

Eg. "break all of my bones,
poke out both my eyes,
pull out all my hairs,
so i can take off this diguise,"

Could be read:
[Break my bones one by one
Tear out both of my eyes
Grab my hair or pull it out
So I can take off my disguise]

I don't know, something like that. Adds more detail to the imagery. Good stuff though.

This was a sad poem, but the rhyming was so cliche'. I knew what the next line would be before I read it. From the concept of this poem it should have had me tearing up, and that is not very hard to do. Again here I think you focused more on the rhyming. I have a few suggestions because I think that you are a talented poet, you just need to not focus your attention on one part of the poem.

1) Let the words flow, don't force them

2) Focus on the meaning and the imagery you are trying to create, not just the rhyming.

3) If you find yourself only focusing on the rhyming walk away from the poem and come back later and you will be able to let the flow take over again.

4) After you think that you are complete: reread, edit, picture it as someone else's poem, and imagine what you would say to that person.

I know you may be thinking that I shouldn't give advice like this when my own poetry may not be that good, but we all make mistakes and learn from them. So. again I give you a 5/5

Best wishes
Letty

Wow..the anger was just rushing out of this poem..i thought it was so graphic and very well done. 5/5..awesome job:)

I loved this....the style was different, the anger was palable, and the emotion was choking.
5/5

Wow! VERY good poem it was excellent! Though I have no clue who it was you were writing to or why it was so physical it was excellent. The flow was great, the emotion was strong, it was great!

Please r/r/c "the mirror" and another poem of your choice! Thanks

Thats..really sad but i really liked how it was writting "gives a 5!!" if i could i would give a 10!!

Wow. the power of that sent me reeling. Strong emotion and strong words.

Like what some other people said, I find that you focused too much on rhyming rather than the actual detail of the poem. Also, when you are writing poetry you should make sure it's written correctly (e.g. always capitalize your 'I's.)

Anyway, this was not bad by any means. It was rather morbid, but that's what you were going for (I presume), and was well written. Good job.

Awww!:(. So sad. But excellent word usage. Deep feelings too.

I could have sworn I already read and commented this poem but it alllowed me to vote again, so great job! I loved it, it was so good, very different but all the same awesome!