Comments : Sometimes I wonder...

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren

    I can feel the emotions..nice i like it.
    oh and thank you for the comment, i took your advice... it sounds better that way.
    good poem and thanx again,
    lauren

  • 18 years ago

    by David Munoz

    Good Job. I wrote a poem like this one, although I think this one is better. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Josiah Larson

    Very wonderful poem, its emotional!
    I loved it.
    in the beginning it reminded me of my ex..

    Good job!

    Thanks for you c/r

    -Josiah

  • 18 years ago

    by Amanda

    It is such a wonderful poem, made me smile and I love the way you wrote it. You are very talented, keep up the great work :)

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Wow! very deep thoughts here... im sure alot of people ask these questions themselvs, you expressed them very well! :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Bogie

    Sometimes I wonder myself?
    This is a wonderfully written
    poem no doubt, the end says
    it all.

    But one thing for sure,
    That makes all that I wondered,
    Not at all important,
    Is that I know... I love you so.

    Thank you for sharing and
    Write On,
    Bogie

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great imagery and perfect questions. keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by yasmin

    I absolutely love this poem

    "Am I the passing cloud?
    That happened to be there,
    And slowly disappears when the sky clears up?"

    thats the part that made me fall in love. from then on, i knew exactly what the poem meant and i can relate so much that its not even funny.

    ive never seen a poem set up this way, its very unique. it flowed beautifully. awesome job.

    if i could vote 6/5 i would

  • 18 years ago

    by BK Butterfly

    Love... so simple, yet so complicated!
    Love... so true, yet too hidden!
    Love... so needed, yet so refused!
    Love... so pure, yet so hurtful!
    Love... so clear, yet so contradictory!

    I hope everything ends well for you!
    and I just love your writing : )

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Awwwwwwww........This is so cute, I love the last line, "Is that I know... I love you so." That is so cute! 5/5 =]

    natz x0x

  • 18 years ago

    by Unforgiven Retniap doolb

    Last stanza was o.k. but I personally liked the part about the rainbow and about the pasiing cloud that interested me alot and gave me a deeper understanding into what you were talking about

    reading your poetry was great!
    ~~Julie~~
    ~Retniapdoolb~

  • 17 years ago

    by Iola

    Excellent descriptions and something that a lot of people can associate with! Really well done and marvelously expressed!
    Iola.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Yet again - another brilliant write. I can almost relate - it was easy to read and understand, but still quite deep. Great work.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Awe thats so unique! I love it! No actually I'm gonna print it out and add you to my faverots list :) Just a little idea here though, in some lines you changed tences from past to present, like right here

    Am I your guardian angel?
    Who guards and help you,
    When you needed most?

    In the beginning you were in preasent.... and then at the bottom you changed into the past with the word "Needed" you could make that "When you need me most"
    Other than that your on your way to being a top notch poet!

  • 17 years ago

    by Amanda

    Oh yes! Another wonderful poem from you. Could get a really clear picture of the feelings in it. Well done :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Every start of the poem made me wonder what was I to my one friend that i'm thinking about sending him this poem. It was really sweet and adorable and the emotions just come flooding over you at once with vivid imagery.

  • 17 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    This such a great poem, everything connects sooo smoothly. And I love how its questions because in life we are always asking ourselves question its human nature we dont know what to believe and we doubt things! Really Good Job, and i hope everything works out.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie and Laura

    Wow what every poem needs emotion and i could feel it being there i could tell you had passion writing this poem and its so true that almost everyone feels that way somtime thanks for letting me read it

    can i add you to my favorites?

    this is tottaly what i am going through right now.... wow how is your boy taking it though? i love how you tottaly expressed your feelings and still made it sound amazing you have so much talent!

    Keep the talent, keep the faith, keep the ability to write beautifully

    -Laura

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This poem is so beautifully written. I love the way that you asked questions and then in the end, you switched it. But this is a great poem, and I loved it, The flow went well and it was a really sweet poem. Great job on this!

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    WOW. That is amazing. I think you have a really good chance of winning Charimatic's contest! It totally drew me in. It's also something people can relate to. however, you could organize the stanzas better, put them into a different order. like the sadder ones to the happier ones. that srta thing. if you dont get it comment me back, adn ill explain it. 5/5.