Comments : So be...

  • 18 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    :O
    I'm speechless... This is just totally awesome!! Powerful, deep and the metaphors.... You've created a wonderful piece... I loved it to be bits :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Passion, intensity....what flow and imagery....this is AMAZING! Your poetry just continues to get better and better!

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Simply put, this is beyond words. I've read it a handful of times now and each time I am left in a state of awe.
    You have a very unique way of writing and this poem shows just that.
    The wordplay within this is beyond belief.
    With your well chosen words you open up a beautiful world of devestating imagery....it's that good!
    This is my new favorite poem, it's magnificent!
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    I had to read it again....
    And that last line is awesome! It gave me chills!

  • 18 years ago

    by Cuddles

    Speechless is as speechless does, and I am speechless. I mean, WOW!! I could read this everyday, and never get tired of it. It's that amazing. I am awed. I am...I really am speechless because there are simply no words to describe how incredible this poem is!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Tim Fleckney

    Wow I knew there was a reason I put you in my favorites list, you seem to have all the skill I hope to have someday. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
    Tim

  • 18 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    Wow.This left me almost speechless-for once(LOL).This is so powerful in so many aspects!It starts out so erotic, so sensual, with a need, a desire, a raw lust, a passion, a love, (I love the lines 'merge into me, and our song shall play as one' so sexual and erotic yet conveying that part od making love that is almost a spiritual experience of two becoming one, the ultimate expression of love between two people)and written so beautifully, then it turns in the middle, such a smooth transition (very well done/written!) and ending with a sense of resignation and a plea so honest and longing, yet so biting with a bit of sadness and anger-the last line is phenomenal!This piece has so much in it-the images and the flow are wonderful, the twist it takes catches one off-guard,the emotions are so intense and honest, so varied and well conveyed but it is definitely the last line that hits with such impact.This is magnificent.I always enjoy your work so much.

  • 18 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    This is truly an extraordinary piece of work. mind blowing and makes one come back time and again to read.

    beautiful flow, the perfect twist and an ending that simply blew me out of my mind!

    great writing

    shobhana

  • 18 years ago

    by PURE HEART

    Wonderful and really it amazed me away......
    great job dear 5/5
    Bharti

  • 18 years ago

    by Dan Bloom

    HAHAHAHAHA I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMG thats so kewl this is like a love poem but it seems like its a lil deppressed too cuz i mean honestly....wouldnt anyone be deppressed if that happened to them?!?!?! I think you should just go for someone else........im always here.... lol

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderful write Melissa, much enjoyed!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Linzy

    You're a great writer! Keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by IlliteracyKills

    Its a good poem, but i noticed it became more like your talking it, like you could say this in an every day conversation...that turned me off a bit
    otherwise its good, no hard feelings i hope.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    Wonderful ... left me at a loss for words. Great imagery.

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    Amazignly written...wow

    Lissa

  • 18 years ago

    by Randy Lee

    Wow, I realy liked this. I have a few you might enjoy.

  • 17 years ago

    by Unconformist

    Wow......this is just, wow! It's great! All of your poems just pull me in...the imagery is just wonderful!

  • 17 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Fantastic Fantastic Fantastic!! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Katie

    WOW!!!! I love this poem. It has so much depth of feeling. So simple, yet so complex ... your mind and your ability with words is a truly wonderful mixture. Well done
    Katie xx