Pain, oh goddess love that is so difficult and a long hard road to go through. I have been there, and still am going through that. Closure is nessesary, so get that between you and the love you lost. End it on a enjoy your life and maybe we can be friends type of thing b/c being friends can help ease the pain. It is hard hun, but life is there for you to live, you can't let it go to waste without a fight. *hugs* Something else I found, often turning around and helping others in their lives can help ease the pain in your own life or put it into prospective. Best to you hun! *hugs!*
Now about that poem, I am religeous so it was nice to have a poem to read along those lines. I did like this poem and how you began talking about the "Red Death," and then connecting it to being hell. I really thought it was a nice peace of work.
Normally I'm not all that fond of religious stuff, but this was good. Rhyming was good and the repetition of "The Red Death" gave a vivid image. There was something lacking from the poem, I think, however I'm having trouble placing what it is. Maybe more grasping words could have been used? Anyway good job. Keep writing.
This is good. I liked the line 'Slowly overcoming the un-innocent'. I think the term un-innocent is very powerful. The poem is a little difficult to follow but rhythm seems deliberate and in a way it does work. Nice poem.