Comments : The Red Death

  • 11 years ago

    by Trampled Angel

    Pain, oh goddess love that is so difficult and a long hard road to go through. I have been there, and still am going through that. Closure is nessesary, so get that between you and the love you lost. End it on a enjoy your life and maybe we can be friends type of thing b/c being friends can help ease the pain. It is hard hun, but life is there for you to live, you can't let it go to waste without a fight. *hugs* Something else I found, often turning around and helping others in their lives can help ease the pain in your own life or put it into prospective. Best to you hun! *hugs!*

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 11 years ago

    by Trampled Angel

    Now about that poem, I am religeous so it was nice to have a poem to read along those lines. I did like this poem and how you began talking about the "Red Death," and then connecting it to being hell. I really thought it was a nice peace of work.

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 11 years ago

    by Fighter

    Wow... very original!! brilliant work, as always. take care,
    -xXx-

  • 11 years ago

    by Sondos

    A brilliantly original poem with a different take on hell. I love how you've classified this as a life poem rather than a dark one. It shows how hell is just part of the circle of life
    Well Done

    All the Best
    Sondos

  • 11 years ago

    by Emma

    I love this. its amazing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Biscuit

    I didnt really understand it the first time i read it so i read it again and it all clicked, thats the sign of good poem, right?

    well done xx

  • 11 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Normally I'm not all that fond of religious stuff, but this was good. Rhyming was good and the repetition of "The Red Death" gave a vivid image. There was something lacking from the poem, I think, however I'm having trouble placing what it is. Maybe more grasping words could have been used? Anyway good job. Keep writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sarah White

    This is good. I liked the line 'Slowly overcoming the un-innocent'. I think the term un-innocent is very powerful. The poem is a little difficult to follow but rhythm seems deliberate and in a way it does work. Nice poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Minkus

    A few of the rhymes were a bit forced, but '5' is not 'perfect,' it's 'excellent.' And so this poem was, most of the rhymes were very good and I was able to catch the flow. Good message, too.

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow this is good, Great work 5/5

    natz x0x

  • 11 years ago

    by F@n©y Ket©hup

    Oh dear...is is an excellent poem.

    It started out pretty weak, but the ending is what matter most and it was splendid!

    "And if innocence is what you sell,"

    I love this particular line.

    ~Atomic

  • 11 years ago

    by J Lau

    Wow... nicely done! Loved the flow and style of this poem... Great write! Keep writing... 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    Awesome sauce dude, we all know I love darkness. Good job I liked the flow, and I loved the word use.

  • 11 years ago

    by holly

    Very ncely done original and and strong message again ver well done ALLY

  • 11 years ago

    by Sole

    Great poem - complex meaning and a great rhyme scheme. Keep it up :)

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 11 years ago

    by alwaysremeniceus

    I really liked the flow and the feeling the poem gives me. I think you expressed yourself very well. I guess maybe I would understand even more f I was religious, but good job anyways :p

    -kelsie

  • 11 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    Very deep and original poem, so emoational!! Some how it touched my heart and left me thinking =0) I loved the flow and the message in the poem...Great job, amazing!!!

    Much Love Sabrina

  • 11 years ago

    by azlan26

    Loved it - was pretty frightening - very clever =]

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Outstanding poem with a powerful message

  • 11 years ago

    by LettersFromEnnis

    I really like this. It gives a clear message withought any complexity. Great work!