Comments : Pain...

  • 11 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    She rly doesnt appreciate what you've done obviously but *sigh* you jus gotta face the music and i'm proud of you bc ur takn this better then I thought. I kno it hurts bud, and its not not suppose to...but just her she cant take back what shes taken from you and the things she didnt say are hat set you free....good luck LYLAB

    Lissa

  • 11 years ago

    by Ruthie

    Wow. that was so powerful. I don't want 2 say that I really enjoyed it because of the pain in it but I really enjoyed the way u structured it and rhymed it. Well done mate... keep on writing... it heals... *hugs*

    Ruthie xoxo

  • 11 years ago

    by Fighter

    Wow... i can feel ur pain through each line. amazing. i hope ur ok. stay strong and take care,
    -xXx-

  • AWWWW. that was amazing. truly wowowowow. lol. it reminded me sooo much of this boy i really liked. and he broke my heart. aww. it fit it sooo perfectly. thanks sooo so much for the comment!!
    *huggggs*

  • 11 years ago

    by Tortured Soul

    Ouch been there dude. great job writing i can feel it. please keep it up.

  • 11 years ago

    by BeeBeeGun

    Aww hope you are ok
    I really am liking your poems they all just have so much meaning to them
    you are a great writer dont change

    keep your head high
    binkz

  • 11 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    OMG!!! I wanted to cry!!! =[ 8/5!! Wow!!!!! Talk abouyt emotions! Woa there nelly!! lol *winks* No, seriously, that's really deep and veeeerrrry meanigful!! Take Care!! and if ya ever want to talk, holla at me!! =]
    ♥Mandie♥

    PS=((Guess whose on my favorites?!....lol =D))

  • 11 years ago

    by Lady in Red

    Let me be one of the first to say wow. If anyone hasn't told you this already I'm telling you now. You are an amazing poet and a really sweet guy. And any girl that would do something like that to you is unworthy of anyone's time. She should feel lucky she even got to be near you. Truely Amazing! 5/5 Keep it up TBOY! (P.s. Thanks for the comment ;))

  • 11 years ago

    by ~*so*over*him*~

    Wow.. i can so relate to this poem.. i guy i really liked just broke my heart.. you really put emotion into this... loved it!!!
    *rachel*

  • 11 years ago

    by Just That Girl

    Omg! this poem is soooo saad! it made me cry! i just cant beleive it!*hugs* i kno that i cant feel half the pain u do rite now! im soo sorry! i hope with all my heart and soul that the love of your life opens her eyes and realizes that there is no one who can love her the way you do! i hope everythiing turns out ok... ur such a sweet guy!! keep up the gr8 work...i abslutly LOVE ur poems...they have alot of emotions and feelings in them!!

    Luv,
    *LuvYou2Death*

  • 11 years ago

    by Ruthie

    Hey davi. I really loved this one! great use of words for your rhyme scheme. flow was pretty good and well yea... it was just overall a great effort davi!!!! :D keep writing i'll b keeping my eye on you!!!! *hugs* ruthie

  • 11 years ago

    by Gracie Jo

    Aww, this poem was so sad. =[ I could definitely relate to a few of your stanzas. Great job.

    I saw your post in the myspace group and figured I'd check you and your poems out.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Always4You

    That was SUPER! Sorry im trying to use other words besides great and wonderful lol. This was my favorite part of the poem..I really like how you worded it..Great job! :)

    I was always there for you
    I always took the extra mile
    Cause i wanted you happy
    I wanted to see that smile

    ~Always4You~(thanks for commenting on my poem)

  • 11 years ago

    by Puerto_Rican_Chick

    Nice job and sorry about the heart break. you'll get through it just keep your head up. propz

  • 11 years ago

    by Knee

    Awwww!!! how sad =(
    I know how it feels. I totally understand. this feels so bad and I hope things will turn to be okay!
    u know I was reli impressed by this poem~~!
    keep it up
    xxxxx