This is a great peice, very welll written. the short lines give a very good pace to the peice and work well with the content to form an effective poem with some very good expression

5/5

You did a great job. The flow was even the verses just right. I gave it 5/5

Really good poem
But the
"Looses control"
I think it should be loses. :)
Thought i'de let you know.
Great job though

She can't take it
anymore
She can't fake it
On the floor
That stanza could be said diffrently...it doesnt really go...it was a little shaky at the start then it got alot better...then it went to that but you ended it good

~bloodscars~

This took my breath away. amazing.

Aww thats so sad, Did you get raped? I know how it feels even though Im a guy. pretty sad huh.. well great poem too..

nick

You too.. i like your writing.. 5/5
~David

Thats good to hear, Im glad you didn't I have though But yeah great poem. and How did you change your name That way, it looks awesome.

nick

I know that, But It looks different from all the rest, I'm going to change mine. Lol. BUt Im adding a new poe tell me what you think.. later nick

Amazin!!! I love it off lol! I added u to ma favzzz 4 life! mwahh
Lambchopkutie:*

Hey love! Wow, that was bloody emotional, wow. You've certainly got lots of fire in you love and a gift with words to express it. I powerful poem hun though I pray you don't really feel that way about life hun. I send hugs.

-Tainted Mikochan

Exellent. a very good poem. the shortness of the stanzas made the poem very easy to read, and the language was exellent

Well done

Ruby

Great poem..yea i thought it was about rape halfway through too. lol

I like this one alot! awesome job!! 5/5!

Wow, just awesome! In such a small amount of words you expressed so much. It made me think. The flow was very well done as well as the rhythm. I really liked the lines:

"A Silent scream
That cannot be heard
Lost in a dream
That can't be triggered"

Feels like i can relate to those words. Once again you put alot of emotion into this write. Your a very talented writer, keep it up! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo

Ur a great poet. ur poem really touched me

Its a beautiful poem. nicely written, and very meaningful. tc

Wow, I dont know what to say other than well done. Really well done. If you need to talk, Im all ears, just email me through a private messge.

~Juls~

Wow i love the first stanza this poem was reallly goooood i loved it the rhyming everything!

SOme of the rhyming is a little shaky - and it doesnt flow perfectly throughout - but then poetry doesn't have to be anything other than the readers perception, so all I can say is :) !!! Another great poem well done :)

Peace. [Sole]