A t-0uching piece great use 0f w0rds. thank u f0r the c0mment 0n my w0rk. meant al0t t0 me!!

l0ve always d0ra

Great poem, i like how you captured your topic. 5/5

That is so strong, how you can take a few words to descibe a momment or occasion is icrediable, I lluv reading your work.

Aww this poem is so wonderful. I enjoyed reading it. I especially love the lines:

"Just looking deep inside ya eyes
took me to another world full of lies.
Believing everything you told me,
telling me how much you loved me."

The only thing I think you could change is instead of putting 'ya' put words like 'you' or 'your'. Also the line:

"poisoned my mind,soul,and heart."
I think you forgot the spaces after your comma's. I think you meant:

"poisoned my mind, soul, and heart."

Other then that, this poem it beautiful. You have a way with words. Keep up the awesome work! bye!

5/5

--Angie xoxo

Good write, I want to see more like it.

Great work with this one. I loved the flow and heart. Nice work!!!

Poisoned my mind,soul,and heart.
((I loved these lines..))
Just looking deep inside ya eyes
((Your..))
Looking at ya beauty
sipping on a smoothie
((your beauty..
And please..Smoothie? My goodness..))

This is alright. In my opinion, no one can write the perfect love poem for no one can explain love. However, you did try and had some very good moments in the poem. So, nice job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

That poem was really nice, it was full of raw emotion..the flow was kindof off since you had a different number of lines in each stanza and the sentences were split up. All together it was a pleasant read.:)

Great poem, your really tallented... i think maybe u could do something more with it... but its still awsome! well done

Love
Jacs
xxxx

That was nice I loved the flow of it

5.5

Marcus

It was good.