Comments : Treasure

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw this is good. Loved how you used to the word treasure, I've never seen that word in a poem, Ever. So great job 5/5

    natz x-x-x

  • 18 years ago

    by BloodScars

    Ah i liked this alot its a very beautiful poem and i got it the first time i read it ^_^
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Hareem

    A sad poem yet well-written, esp the 2nd & 3rd stanzas.

  • 18 years ago

    by DavidBrendan

    I've been feeling that way a lot..trying to find a place that's as carefree as that. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    I think there might have been a typo or maybe i was intentional... "Peace to complicated", thought I'd point that out. Great write though... keep up the good work! Keep writing. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Loulou

    Wow this is a wonderful poem i love the words and the rhyming great job 5/5

    love tabby

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    The last stanza makes such an impact :)
    Great work.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by Stabbylou

    Great poem, it's very sad and emotional, makes me feel different things at once. I loved it. Keep writing x

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful sad penned, though sad but flowed well written, beautiful done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Emma

    I really enjoyed reading this...I loved the flow...nice job...Great Write
    Emma 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    Very elevated imagery...this is pulchritudinous....!!

    [lost_laureate - come find me]

  • 17 years ago

    by Always4You

    Lies are no longer an issue
    The truth is what you find
    No more rage and hatred
    Peace too complicated for the human mind

    I really liked the words you used here..Great great job!!!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was good too. Wasn't too short, Wasn't too long. The rhyming was good and so was the flow, Overall, I loved this one aswell. You're a really great writer. Don't ever stop! 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    That was good! :) i loved the last stanza! its so cute.. hehe.. keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Aww. It's so sad =( I feel the same way sometimes. -sigh- Anyways, flow was good in most places, but was a bit rocky in some parts. Some lines were too long compared to others and some were too short. The vocab was excellently chosen out. Keep it up! =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I realy liked the poem.. It made me teary eyed kinda.. Not many things do that. The flow and structure was well also. I enjoyed it great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Very nice. I really liked the ending, it really pulled it together. Good job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Aww.. this poem is really great.. the flow and rhyme are wonderful.. as well as the emotion behind it nice job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Hahaha! GOOD job! on this poem! I enjoyed it! keep writting! well done! good choice of words!

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Sin is not a fear here
    [[I love this line with all my heart.]]

    Lies are no longer an issue
    The truth is what you find
    No more rage and hatred
    Peace too complicated for the human mind
    [[Though in this sentence the first three lines contridict the last one...]]

    Anyways.
    I like this poem, but I felt you might have been able to say more. It felt unfinished to me. The fourth stanza should have had more after it and then the last stanza as the last stanza. Perhaps that's only me, but I felt it very unfinished.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5