Comments : I Stand

  • 18 years ago

    by Minkus

    Some of my poetry is not about who I am, but rather who I wish I could be, who I dream of being. It's up to you to decide which if that is true for this poem or not. I gave it a five because it holds a deep meaning for me.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I really liked the imagery you had and as you said, it must hold some deep meaning for you. Personally, some of the repetiveness just wasn't for me but that was overlooked by the wood choice. Since I can't rate 4.7 I'll round up to an even five.

  • 18 years ago

    by Daze

    Good poem, i liked it and it had meaning, good flow to it, i was interesting to read, good job

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    The deep images and descriptions in this are powerful and give the poem life. I liked the references to time and months because this emphasised the "reality" thing even more by setting a time and place. The format and flow for the first four stanzas was spot on, however, I don't know if you're aware but the final stanza has more of a paragraph format. I'm presuming this is an error, and it should be as the previous four, because you also have some character typos through out the poem that need sorting out. With out a doubt the final stanza is just as well written as the rest, it's just the format.
    I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, keep it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Wow, that is a piece of work, definately! You have a great set up that you execute well throughout the entire poem. You also use developed vocabulary making this poem stand out and be an intellectual read, but still make sense. This poem has great imagery and figurative langauge in general. Nice write.

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 18 years ago

    by Sondos

    This was very original. I really did like a lot. I loved the imagery you used. The format and flow were brilliant.
    Well Done
    Sondos

  • 18 years ago

    by Syn

    Very interesting poem and great creativity . i love the structure.

    ~David

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Great imagery in this one. I felt like I was watching a movie while you were freezing to death LOL. Very nice job on this!

  • 15 years ago

    by isabel

    I really liked this poem... the imagery is really marvellous... in:
    "I stand... frozen
    in the silver moonlight
    which brightens the mist,
    and gives it substance…"

    i feel like I can see and feel what you say, instead of only reading it...

    you have a great vocabulary (better than mine :) had to look up a few words in the dictionary).... And an incredible depth of soul... It amazes me, sincerely...

    I like the repetition of "I stand" - It emphasizes the image of a lonely standing figure... :)

    The poem flows very well, also... Which I find difficult in a free-verse poem... (never managed to write one with a decent flow... :) )

    5/5 doubtless

    *isabel*

  • 13 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This definitely seems somewhat like a follow on to "Experiment", or an explanation to it, or even an adaptation to what "Experiment" was about. The imagery in this peace was wonderful, though I realised something; you can almost gain the same imagery from "Experiment" as you can from this one, even though this has more in-depth wording and more substance to it. The same image, the same feeling of coldness, of the dark, is created.

    Interesting. :)