Comments : Animal soul

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderful poem lisa, and welcome back. A most superlative write you have penned here, great job!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    4th line from the bottom...you probably mean...
    they're......(or they are...?)
    ********************************************
    we do, indeed, drown inside of their goodness....their gift...our blessing...
    grateful..grateful..
    You have a charming depth of vision...grateful...
    grateful.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I don' see how anyone could miss the depth and flawless flow of this poem. or give it less than a 5

  • 17 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    In swelling glands that
    are merely controlled by

    you could take 'that' and 'are' outta there, adding a comma after glands..

    simplistic little eyes
    that are

    seems like 'that' should be 'which,' and also sounds better to me.. thats my crit,.. i love how your poetry is like an image morphing, almost.. i liked it a lot