I loved the word choice most of all. Second thing I liked seemed to be that the message seemed clear. But what I really didn't like was the minor spelling and grammar errors. After the first couple, it sort of took something away from the poem.

I have always been pretty harsh on judging work so please don't be upset.. Your images were nice but kinda scrabbled and the tense of some words needed to be changed. that and some of the message was abit scattered but it was a good attempt. Please continue to try and harness the message first. Ok take care...

This was really quite sad in a way but otherwise a pretty good poem xxALLYxx

Forget spelling errors etc etc its not an exam you are doing.
i found this a good write,very sad,and sent a messagehow you were/are feeling so all in all 4/5