Nice poem love, only thing is maybe you added tattered and torn a few too many times, no meaning to be insulting. Maybe you could concider adding that every four lines instead of every two. Just a thought, but either way a nice poem. Best of luck with your book, I wait to meet you on the best seller's list.

-Tainted Mikochan

I like this poem, its really good. I kinda agree with Tainted Mikochan, though.

I like the message it sent: Decide now. 5/5.

I like the over all feel of it but you might want to organize it into stanzas because it makes it a little easier to read.
I was a little lost with this line:
"I wish you could see just"
is that supposed to be that way or is just and see supposed to be switched around?

I really liked this it had a great feeling to it. Very powerful and meaningful.

All the Best
Sondos

Awesome!!!!!!!!!! I loved it!
well done
xxx

Oh dear - I will start crying in a minute if I continue :) Another excellent poem - what more can I say? Just keep up the writing, and continue writing at this standard because I love it xD

Peace. [Sole]

Wow, Kaylee-- This was really different to your new stuff. Still good though, just different. Wow. You've come along way in your writing though, Keep it up!

Natalie``