I personally liked it......I've asked many of the same questions....it could be organized a little better...and it didn't quite flow right.....but it was a good meaning...

Good intentions but I think you could have gone far with this: Maybe describe the homeless as you see them, or how you feel about people seeling themselves. The words are great alone but maybe you could add something to make it seem deeper. 4/5

I so loved it!

I actually like it, It's different. Great job on this one! Keep it up hun x-x

I agree that the flow wasn't just right but it was still a great poem!!! 4/5

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I LIKE DAT SHYT RIGHT THIER THATS SOME DEEP SHYT I READ THAT SO MANY TIMES HOW CAN U THINK OF SOMETHING LIKE THAT U HAVE A GREAT GIFT IN WRITEING AND IN MINE