Vampire Love

by xXxDarkDreamerxXx   Mar 20, 2006


As I walk to the park
It starts to get dark.
I'm alone
and feeling very cold.
A hand touches me,
I turn to see.
A stranger smiles
his features handsomely wild.
He take my hand,
I feel like I can no longer stand.
He kisses me briefly
and felt kinda silly.
We stared at each other,
my mind starts to wonder.
He holds me close,
and I tell him "I know."
A vampire is what you are,
I've known it from the start.
I know you watch me
and help me when I'm in need,
Now its my turn help you.
This is just between us two.
Take my blood, if its what you need
I know you need to feed.
He says "No" because I'm here for you.
I have fallen in love with you.
I look at his gold colored eyes
and they hold no lies.
I see that you tell the truth
and I say me too!!
We walk together
and know that this Will last forever.

Copyright ©2006 Jeannette R

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  • 16 years ago

    by Estefania

    Hey great poem, really liked it! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Rahl The Layman Lord

    Bit creepy sis...but good none the less. You and your vampires haha...what no one really knows is that you are actually a ghost...but thats to their own peril

    -Jason-

  • 17 years ago

    by shatteredsoul

    Golden eyes huh?
    reminds me of twilight *wink*

  • 17 years ago

    by +Purple Sky+

    AWESOME poem!! I think it's adorably sweet, lol ;P
    (p.s. thanx for the comment :))

  • 17 years ago

    by aaron 1 remo

    First I will start off with a compliment; I am envious of how well you told a story through the poem that is really cool and something I really need to work on. Now for a little bit of constructive criticism, I felt that the rhyme scheme was very bland and didn't excite me to much. It was like aabbccddeeff perhaps try something like ababcdcdeeff which might help the rhythm/pace as well well I hope that helped (if it even made sense)
    much love
    Aaron (remo) xxx

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