Cool poem, I think the repetiton of 'And when I scream,
I scream disease,
I scream the lies,
I scream to please' kinda lost the impact for the last verse, but still a great poem, keep up the good work : )

Cool poem, I think the repetiton of 'And when I scream,
I scream disease,
I scream the lies,
I scream to please' kinda lost the impact for the last verse, but still a great poem, keep up the good work : )

I didn't really get it and all the stuff about the diseases kind of grossed me out. The repetition was okay, not great exactly, but it is a good poem I guess for this catergory. I think some of your wording in the start was a little shaky, though. Otherwise, good poem.

Hmm it was interesting. unlike any poem i have ever read. i liked it despite sort of being repulsed, bc i dont really do dark. but i liked it; unique and stuff. coolness.

Pretty sweet yet bitterly dark poem.. i definitely like the way you worded each stanza and the AWESOME flow of it, all the way through.. i dont really have any crits, just praise, but it's totally deserved.. YOU ARE AWESOME.. 5/5, hands-down. =O)