Comments : Within Me

  • 18 years ago

    by Holly

    I thought this was a wicked poem keep it up 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    Good job on the poem the rhyming was good I loved the last two lines that ended it nicely. In the fourth line I think it would flow better if you had "cannot" instead of "can't" in the sixth line from the bottom I think "into the mirror" would also smooth out the flow. Other than that very good job

  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    Fantastic poem very well writtin keep writing hun and take care sarah x

  • 18 years ago

    by LiL K

    Wow, this poem is amazing...I can't believe you're only 13. You have awesome talent to be that young! I'm definately adding you to my favs...and thanks for your comment on my poem btw!

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenToy

    Great poem. I love the whole feel of it and all the emotions put into it. I know from experience how hard it is to write about that kind of pain and it's not easy getting the point forth without it sounding a little clique.. This poem, I think, is pure emotions and no clique at all. Love it.

    *BrokenToy

  • 18 years ago

    by jamie ellen

    Very well done the emotion was very blatant

  • 16 years ago

    by Nikki

    Wow - a very powerful, engaging poem! The last two lines are simple yet effective.

  • 16 years ago

    by Raven

    LOVED IT !!!!!!
    You did really good on this poem

    ~Mz.Raven