Fallen Heroes

by †Undone♥   Mar 28, 2006


I look around the battle grounds,
I see bullets, I hear screams.
dark red blood against blue coats,
It's like the nightmare of my dreams.

I feel the bullet pierce me,
A sharp pain in my chest.
Soon my life is finished,
Just like all the rest.

I seem to be picked up,
Invisible hands bring me to my feet.
I look around the battle ground,
And see my best friend's attempted retreat.

I scream and yell his name out,
But it lands upon deaf ears.
I seem him fall onto the ground,
I shed unseen tears.

I feel cold hands upon me,
It is him, my greatest friend
We stay and watch the battle,
Until the bitter end.

After the battle is over,
Theres a pathway, beyond is a light.
We look around, take a breath,
And go without a fight.

* I had to write this poem for a History Project. It is about a battle during the Civil War.*

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  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Amazing peice, the flow is smooth and consistant the peice runs well thoughout. the imegry and descriptions are fantastic and the overall peice quite original. as it is a peice you had to write for a class it is even more impresive, or at least it s to me as i could never write a poem on command.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    I really like it. basically the whole thing is very good. except for "And see my best friend's attempted retreat" to me it doesnt flow with the rest of the stanza. besides that awesome.

  • 18 years ago

    by LiL K

    This is a really good poem...especially since it was one you HAD to write. I have some poems I've been assigned, but usually they're not as good cause I don't really have inspiration to write them.

    You did good with this write, it gave me chills :) 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Great - you actually take heed of peoples spelling corrections :) Thats already impressed me, as most people just leave it. It means you can take a little criticism . . . Well . . . there isn't any of that, so I may as well just get on with praising your beautiful work!

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenny

    Great imagery used, you may want to correct a spelling mistake 'But it lands upon def ears' Is the def meant to be deaf? Anyway great poem!

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