Comments : Dreams

  • 12 years ago

    by Latasha

    Very good peom hun.. i can tellu will have some amazing poems to come... keep up the good work 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    Nice job, keep posting.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is definately my favorite of yours that i have read. just simply amazing. everything flowed well, and your rhyming scheme was superb! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Cattiebrie

    Thank Jenni! I love your comments, they are helpful. I am seeing that the majority seem to like rhyming..I am trying to get away from that a bit now, working with the words to stand alone as images. I want power and raw emotion to come through now. I get scattered a bit I think.

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    WHOA!!!! Dang girl! this poem is amazing!!! Simply amazing. I love this. I think it should be catorgized as dark instead of sad. Your rhyming blew me away.. and the flow.. whooosh. . I love this part the best!:

    Dreams are the blue of a new baby's eyes
    or the anger and hatred behind twisted lies.
    Dreams are the gold of a sun shining bright
    or the scream of a child piercing the night.
    Dreams are reflections on a ripple free lake
    and dreams are the nightmares that keep me awake.

    AMAZING JOB!

    5/5!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is another very good poem, love the flow, perfectly writen, this is another 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow. I didn't think it was missing anything at all. And as you, I too like the contrast in the lines from one to the next. It gives a great metaphor for good vs. evil.

    The flow was really well done, and it didn't seem forced to me at all. The rhymes were original, and did not seem cliche what so ever. Keep writing. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Awesome, so deep full of emotion and pain.
    I can really feel the emotion from your words, its really gripping, the lines were quite long but that added to the greatness of the flow.
    keep the good work up,
    Love Tara-Kay
    xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by LuvLyLynn

    I like this poem too...You have amazing talent...keep up the good work...5/5...

  • 11 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    I really liked this poem, its refreshing to see a rhyme from you. well done hun.
    Much love and many kisses,
    Bex