Comments : If I Were Unattractive, You Wouldn't Hear A Word I Say

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Omfg!!!!!!!! i just can't describe what ... how much thios poem effected me... it... oimg, it is soooooo good like, incredible... i, just, can't describe how much this has touched me... well, it's not really a poem but everything it said is so true if i could explain what i feel towards this work, i would, but, words just can't describe it. All i can say is that you did an increible job at portraying your emotions. All of the words you used, the truth to what you said, just... EVERYTHING. Incredbile. If i could, i would rate this poem 10/5 but, i can only go 5/5. Please keep in touch! Kepp writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
    ~stevie~

    I LOVE IT!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mo

    Brilliant. I really liked it - suppose cause its all true! And originally I was thinking "Wow... I wish this was set out in stanzas instead of a big block of writing..." but when I got to the end it was more fitting to have it as a big block because as you said - its a rant! Its one of those pieces that you sprout out when things push you over the edge and you say it all in one breath without stopping to worry about stanzas and structure and all the "pleasing to the eye" things. Good job. One suggestion tho - put a couple of full stops in there so you can tell where one sentence stops and the next begins. Good job. And now... to breath out and let my stomach flop over my jeans... :)