Normally I'd say break it up bit this just seemed to flow better as one long stanza then anything. It didn't seem like forced words and that it was thrown off by anything. The subject; I've read poems like this before and hwen people write about the same subject alot it's hard for one poem to stand out. I think this one tried to stand out, though. 5/5
Really sad poem :-(
I enjoyed reading it - it flows well, the rhyme isn't forced and there is a lot of emotion in it. I'm just hoping it isn't true and you're OK, take care and keep writing your poems are awesome!
Passionate, powerful and real, definately real. I could feel the girl's anziety (sp) and her fear and then her anger. Her road is one I have walked before, so I can relate a great deal to her story, as sad as it is, it is the tale of so many young girls in our country. I hope you're okay love. Best of luck to you.
Amazing! This poem flowed so well together. I like your style as well, nicely done. Normally i'd say what my favorite lines are but every single line in this poem is just wonderful. And to some I can relate. Keep up the awesome work! 5/5
Very good poem, but honetly tina, i admire your poems sooo much, please don't do stuff like that...your poems help me pull through so much, please eat! don't cut anymore....it's almost as if you were my friend......
My best friend had anorexia. I couldn't bare to see her suffering. One day when my anger had reached its top I said;
"you're gonna die, and I'm not gonna stay to watch you die"
It was a stupid thing to say. Yet I could see in her eyes she understood. She got so mad, I never managed to make it up to her. She just didn't want to see me anymore. So it was one of the last things I said to her.
She survived it though. And I guess she's fine. But it still hurts me like hell. It still hurts, whenever I read a poem on this subject. But oh well.. that's life I guess.
You did a great job with this poem. It was fanatic, just like all of the rest. You have a wonderstyle style and flow, I love your poems. It really helps me through the day to remember your poems and your courage. You're very strong Tina, and I admire you.
i love this and relate to it... if this is what u feel i no exacly what ur going through.i havent eatn a full proper meal 4 3 months,i still hate my body and think im fat.i hate the feeling but cant make it go...as hard as i try it just wont.i just wana let u no ur not the only 1 going through this and if u wont some1 to take to im here
What a powerfully sad poem. The message itself is interesting - not many people write about things like eating disorders in the frame of someone who wants to keep doing it. Usually they're anti or "I wish I could stop". I think word choices make this sound a little weaker than it could, a vocabulary issue I'm sure. But it's very good.