Comments : Words

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    This is great...in its own abstract little way..most people write a love poem and over use the words love....the sarky little way you critically think about a word to describe it...is great...
    Improve:
    Check out the typo: "nest step?"
    And perhaps a better title..
    Awesome though...

    [lostlaureate -come find me]

  • 17 years ago

    by Jacob Perry

    Hmmm i liked this poem alot i espeacially like your structure and how you used the words at the beginning almost like an emphasis or a catch to cause the reader to continue on to see what exactly your talking about. i admire that you were able to write an awesome love poem and not use the word "love" half a billion times like the majority of people do

    only thing i can spot that seems out of place is: "the nest step" im going to assume this is a typo but uh yes other than that a great poem an excellent read keep up the good work and all that 5/5 for sure :)
    ~jacob

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Different: Kind of explaining why it's nerve racking somtimes to find the right words to say.

    I like how it's unique. Maybe could have gone in depth with word choice so we could feel it, but on the plus side it didn't have the word love a thousand times or the word baby in it.

  • 17 years ago

    by PS

    This is unique. ive never seen anything like. nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Great job.. i think this is the first poem ive seen like this .. so thats good that its unique and really takes you away from everyone elses. but i do think maybe longer and maybe more rhyming to have it flow better? but besides that i liked it! Keep it up

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 17 years ago

    by authum darkness

    Great poem. It speaks from the heart.