Hah thats hilarious. i like it. it does have some abrupt stops in it. and teh beginning "twas it was christmas" i dont know if you meant to do that but yeah. besides that i really liked it. :)

It did have abrupt stops. Maybe make that one line in lowercase with an exclaimation point. A different take on Christmas. Might have to look out for those nija elve's ;)

Can you please read my Sweet Amy poems please :)

Dude, i loved this one it made me laugh all the way through. 5/5
i dont think you should change anything

Lol great poem, its rili gd.
i jus didnt understand
"Twas it was Christmas " because "twas" means "it was"....therefor...ur jus repeatin urself? and also u may need to sort the structure of stanza 8. but other than that the poem was imense! lol 5/5 jesxxx

That was funny

That was indeed funny =D Maybe a little too violent, but funny XD