Fantastic imagry and description in this peice, and a well explored idea. the progression thoughout is good running smoothing though the different "stages" and holding the readers attention well. the vocab is interesting really adding to the peices overall effect.

5/5

I loved this bit:

"You have left a part of yourself in all you have done, and thusly you shall live on."

This is an in depth and insightful study into ageing. You right with an intellect I cannot put down to one thing from the latin to other cultral refs this is amazing.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Wow the language in this was very complex, I honestly didn't understand all of it
But the bits I got were incredibally menaingful imgages...and an insightful look on many aspects of life
The line:
"You shall ne'er become a name" I just thought that that line struck me...well I saw it as you will be a person just not a name...you have a personality
Excellent

Another complex poem. Your use of language here completey threw me, there were quite a few words I didn't understand - and I'm not going to pretend that I even understood most of the poem. The parts I did understand were excellent, but the main message I recieved was that of travelling through the stages of life.

'quite uncharted by that vessel bearing you hence'

I took this line as the vessel being youth, taking the passenger to the island of older age. Great imagery.

Peace. [Sole]

This was great! I can see that someday, you'll be compared to great poets such as Seamus Heaney! It was a pleasure to read this poem. 5/5

Amazing. truly amazing. there is little i can say to that.

Ruby

However, i will try, having had sometime to go over it. the lanugae used was very comple, i am glad i had an advased vocab, as i could understand most of it. the poem was inpiering, even if the exact meaning is not clear.

i would not be suprised if it is soon YOUR style people will try to use.

Ruby

This poem put forth really great images. You could really see what you were describing. You have an amazing sense of vocabulary, as good as any poet does. Interesting setup, almost like paragraphs. Although in the beginning i was overwhelmed I really enjoyed reading it. Great job.

Very good write. I think for me at the beginning when I started to read I was unsure of what to expect almost as if it looked overwhelming. The style you chose to write this was different and unique, paragraph form. I myself find it very hard to write in that style.
I may sound like a broken record but your use of vocabulary is very imressive.

Such evocative imagery and such a stunning use of language, truely masterful. I think the deliberate obscurity of the meaning gives the reader a great opportunity to read into your poem as far as they want, whether all they want is to skim the surface or dive into what is quite obviously an incredibly deep and well thought out poem. 5/5, no question x

Powerful indeed. Such complexity in a piece deserves true recognition. I think your writing will inspire a lot of us here. You ended the poem with the perfect metaphor "If not for aspirations, the Light would ne'er again shine." Excellent write!

Wow..i mean...WOW!...i'm...speechless. i loved it so much. great imagery and depth. great use of vocab too. your poem really made me think...i love poems that do that. 5/5. terrific.

Amazing poem from storyline to structure. I truly enjoy reading it and believe the work is as relateable as it is revolutionary. I hope you keep to writing as I would like to become a regular reader.