Although I'm not really fond of non-rhyming poems, I actually enjoyed this one! I think it was because of the imagery and wording. My favourite lines were:
"A voice murmurs into dimness"
"A silken voice floats up in harmony"
--- lovely choice of words.
P.S.: I'd really appreciate it if you could check out some of my poems when you have some spare time =)
First off, thank you very much for the great lengthy comment. It is much appreciated, and tells me everything about what you think, lol it is probably the longest one I've had but the best by far. Plus this poem right here, I can see throughout it a scene of this happening from start to finish. The details in it not a lot, but makes myself think of more of it, even after I have finished reading it.
Great poem, it is short but still very powerful, I enjoyed reading it.You created effective and really incredible rhythm with just few words, I like the wording too and you expressed emotions excellently! Well done!