Well Well Well, being a man its hard for me to comment on this one but i'll as u wrote a very powerful poem here.

I must admit, i loved the first part of poem..lol..lol

all the best and take care
5/5

Nicely done. Your beginning set up something different than what the ending showed. Well done for that twist and the words though plain were strong for the piece.
~S3I -Faith

Very good !! i like this poem but you gotta start to trust people. Dreams do come true , Lies can change into truth but if you sit in your room and do nothing bout it and being afraid of pain will never change you. Lol not trying to be a preacher but reading you poem made me feel that u feel this way but great poem!

Appreciate your kindness, but i kinda like your poems better.

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