Comments : Dreams Substituting Reality

  • 17 years ago

    by lOVER

    Wow... thats like a really touching kind of poem.. its beautiful,
    you wrote the poem in a really good, easy, simple style...

    take care xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Time doesn't heal all wounds, I believe love does. When you feel like something been stolen or a promise broken, dreaming seems like the natural thing to do. Don't give up on the good dreams, don't forget the broken ones. The poem could have gone more in depth but otherwise it was really good. Dind't really notice any mistakes and the ending tied in well. The title stood out a bit. Good luck in writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    I felt that I could relate to this and I think the title is genius!
    Nicely written not a word out of place.

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 17 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Fantastic peice, the begining it great really geting the readers interest and introducing the peice well. the ending is also very powerful. the content is very clearly written and has a lot of interest in the way it is compiled.

    also i'd like to add that the title is very good, it really works well with the peice and just sounds like a perfect title (if that makes sence)

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Carmen

    Absolutely amazing poem... wonderful, and i can relate. it sucks being in love w/ someone you cant have... *sigh* 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by PS

    I'm slowly falling and falling
    Watching my world slip away
    Everything I've ever known
    Is now everything I hate

    ^ i like those lines. nice poem overall. it shows the breaking on a dream and the sadness that comes with it. nice.

  • 17 years ago

    by LuvMeAlwayz

    Awesome poem, very touching

  • 17 years ago

    by Emily

    I'm slowly falling and falling
    Watching my world slip away
    Everything I've ever known
    Is now everything I hate

    That was my favorite Stanza to read! I like how in this poem you make an emphasis about the lost dreams, and it really makes it sadder. Good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    The last stanza was a wow factor. A the title is so witty. This didnt need rhyme or anything fancy in itself it was amazing. I loved this and I wouldn't change a thing....

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Awesoem - the flow is perfect, and the vivid imagery is very strong. 'Crying is my only weakness' Ironically, I thought that this line was the weakness of the poem. Crying is usually used in strength - imagine each tear another stress flowing from your body. However, people may interpret that as they wish. Nicely written.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by nikki

    Again this is awesome 5/5 keep up the good work ur a rly good poet. i luved it

  • 17 years ago

    by FireCracker

    OMG! I loved this poem .. it was so moving and it was absolutely amazing!! Way to go.. awesome work!!!! *MUAH*