Good poem, excellent message. The only problem I have is that the rhyme scheme is kind of all over the place, and I cringe at bad schemes. Overall GREAT poem, I loved the emotion. My only advice is to work on the rhyming. (I'm not trying to bring you down, but in stanzas 1 & 2 you have a nice ABAB pattern...then you get further and in some cases it doesn't rhyme at all. Just try to stick to a scheme, or do a free verse.)

4/5

joy*:.xx

Tnx joe,
but the rhyme scheme is this poem is
abcb
it is not abcb
that is why it look like the rhyme get messed up,
but tnx a lot for the advise

That was very nice, because it was very trusting.
I think friendship is beautiful because friends don't question each other, they learn to trust. So, thank you very much for sharing this poem with everyone. It was short, but soft and caring...

//T.L.//

Wow-this is a really good poem- I love the topic about friendship. It is sad when a friendship ends-especially when you completely trusted them and they were your best friend. I like how you incorporated questions into the poem! 5/5

Good job on this one as well..........5/5

This is a great piece really easy to relate to as i think we have all been in a situation like this in our lives.

great work

5/5 is what i rated it at.

gema xoxo

Once again you did a great job expressing your emotions and I really like that in a poem. 5/5

Aww.. I used to have abest friend.. but she turned into a BBBBBB.. lol nice one

Very true....thanks for ur comment

Awwww that poems kinda sad but its good 5/5
~courtney~

I can really relate.i think its a wonderful poem.losing people is probly one of the hardest things to do ever.but i must say,you make some great poetry out of it :Dkeep it up
--lexie

Goran,

First of all, I'd like to say that I really loved this poem. It's definitely worth a 5/5. But now as to why it is worth that.

I liked the repetitive first line of each stanza "I would not ask you if" and then something to go with it... It was very well-written.

The flow was very good and your rhymes were not forced. This was a very original piece of literature and it made me sad... Because you describe how great this person was and it shows that this person meant a lot to you, but it ended somehow... So, I want to commend you on your portrayal of emotions.

My favorite stanza was the last one:

"I would not ask you, if
This is the meaning of true friend.
You were my best friend,
How did it all end?"

It really summed everything up and was a good ending. Good job!!

~BJ~

Awesome poem :)

Wow this is like awesome.I know exactly how you feel friends can change right before your eyes.I Love It.Good job 5/5 poem.
xoxostrugglingxoxo

Awww. This one is kinda sad. I loved it though. Very well written.

I always thought best friends would be there forever, I have lost friends and never understood why.. still to this day I don't understand how they could throw the friendship away.. it's sad but guess they weren't that good a friend in the first place.. another good poem xx

Wonderful poem. I can relate to it a lot. Losing a friend is truly heartbreaking. I understand exactly where you were coming from while writing this. Keep up the great work. xxx

Another poem i can conect to lol. the lay out it awsome and it gives a clear thought of what you are trying to say. super job :D

~Terra

That was a good written poem! very well written! very sad! and sorry the friendship had to end! keep ur head up all the time

5/5

keep it up!

This is a really good poem. im sure a lot of people could relate to it too. and it has really good structure. good job. my favorite.