Comments : Dear Diary...

  • 11 years ago

    by swill

    Wowwwwww darien i totally totally loved this keep it up hun you are so awesome....im a fan!!!
    it was long and i couldnt take my eyes OFF it....it captured me all along...and what a sad story...beautiful
    Dhaval

  • 11 years ago

    by katie!

    Wow darien, this was really amazing, I loved it! it was long but it kept me completely gripped from beginning to end, it told a really sad story which I felt I could relate to, I love the way it finishes off, very interesting... well done...

  • 11 years ago

    by dora

    0mg darien. i really liked the way u wr0te this with such p0wer and em0ti0n. w0w it was s0 like.. heartfelt. very sad and deep. great j0b 0n this 0ne. h0pe ur d0iin g0od. =]

    l0ve fr0m
    d0ra

  • 11 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Man... This is very deep, sad and moving. The flow kept me gripped and I read it smoothly to the end without any interruption. This is a little different from what you write, and I must say it's good different. Superb writing my friend. Oh and good luck with those exams :)

  • 11 years ago

    by JAVIER

    Tat was a good poem i really liked it keeep writing trust me on this i knw it might sound lame but i went through the same stuff you went through i knw how you feel

  • 11 years ago

    by danie

    Wow. i give you major kudos... and it reminds me of someone i know. keep writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Colby

    This is an amazing poem. I loved it, so deep and true. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Suri dawn

    O my goodness!This is such an AMAZING poem!GREAT job!Wow I am very proud to give you a comment!It is just so good!WOW!

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Oh wow, intense. I got the shivers, keep up the gd work! and keep ur head up high, there are others...if this is really about a gurl that you fell for and hurt you like this that is...
    -Jenna xo

  • 11 years ago

    by Jade Angel

    Your poem is amazing!! im sorry that she put you through so much pain. i can relate so much to this poem coz i was like sally i had a boyfriend then we broke up and i met sum1 else but i realised that i loved my ex and now we are together. maybe she really does love you, she just made a mistake. you should follow your heart i knw its scary but u can only learn from wat u encounter.
    my best wishes for you in the future
    Jade:)

  • 11 years ago

    by PS

    Wow thats intense. i love it. i usualy hate long poems but that kept me until the very end. amazing. the end is esp haunting. its so sad but the diary idea worked awesomely. i love.

  • 11 years ago

    by Melissa

    Wow, Darien! I love everything about this poem.. So powerful and heartbreaking.. I really love how you did this one in a whole, amazingly written! Awesome stuff!

  • 11 years ago

    by Naima

    Wow, that was so beautiful yet dark. I can can fathom the things running through your mind at that time. I too keep a diary and have entires of things such as those which you write about in your poem. It's so sad but I've been there emotionally before. I hope things are working out ofr you and your girlfriend. Get back to me on your condition hopefully it's a joyousone...

    Naima

  • 11 years ago

    by Cuddles

    Wow, Darien! I totally love this!! The title got me and I was hooked from there. Excellent, excellent job on this. Completely amazing!

  • 11 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Wow, that was amazing! AMAZING! This one should really have been one of the top poems! WOW! You definatly have a spot on my faverotes list! wow..... this was just amazing!

  • 11 years ago

    by StefQ

    This is the best poem i read in a while now! i really mean it, it's rhyming scheme is the best and it flows beautifly ! 5/5

    ~StefQ

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw.. This is really sad. But really good. I did a poem like this too.. But.. It was bad lol.. Even though it was pretty long, it was really good. You knew what to write to keep the readers attention! So 5/5 =] && Thanks heaps for the comment, I don't have any music for my songs, But i'm working on it cause I know a few people where I live that are in bands aswell. So yesh! So thanks again =]

    `taleeee xx

  • 11 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Good poem:-)

  • 11 years ago

    by Poetically Speaking

    I don't have a Diary, but I can relate to some of what you speak. Good job man. I like the way you speak your story. 5.5

  • 11 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    The diary format worked a treat on this. It was so raw and real thats what I love about your poetry. I come across many male poets stuff on this site but you wrote so beautifully. The last two lines were so powerful and so very sad.

    [lost_laureate - come find me]