Comments : A Very Good Lie

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Well done, Mom! I really like this, it has a nice flow and is quite intriguing.
    Especially these lines:

    "But, oh I was wrong, when it all fell apart
    Leaving debris in the place of my heart"

    Such interesting imagery, debri in place of my heart...just wow!
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 17 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow I agree with Holly them lines were amazing...my favourite part in the poem. Absolutely loved it.

    take care, lis

  • 17 years ago

    by Knoxy

    Hey, i really enjoyed reading this poem...im sorry for everything that you had to go thru...i've been thru that before...and it just pisses me off that he had to lie about everything or whatever...ppl like that just arent worth it...u deserve better...great write
    ~Luv Alwayz Knoxy

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was a very interesting poem.. I loved the part about the sugar and the water.. such a deep and unique metaphor well thought out.. I dont think anything else would have fit so perfectly in that spot way to go.. nice poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by ~yOu EnVy Me ~

    And you know i love this poem
    cause i can agree with it those very good lies...they kill me 5/5
    great**

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Ok, this poem really got to me... i really am like crying right now. im just so amazed that you could write this, this is exactly what i was feeling after my boyfriend broke up with me. he said all these things to me, and in the end he had been lying the whole time.
    anyways... i love it, great job!
    5/5!