Comments : The long lost dream

  • 17 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Thats really sweet! really nice flow, good job! keep up the work, and dont let anyone tell you you cant change the world!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sondos

    That was so inspirational
    I really liked it

    Sondos

  • 17 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    "I'm not going to save the world,
    I'm going to change it!"

    Beauty of a poem very inspirational. Not so sure why this is a love poem but it was a pleasure to read. If this is based on your own experience I think hope you hold on to that dream and continue to persue it. All the best with your writing.

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaitlyn

    Wow,this piece of writing was very inspirational. the last lines were amazing. always hold on you your hopes and dreams. I dont think this should be under 'love'. Other than that it was a really good write. it was different from what i read but i loved it!

  • 17 years ago

    by StefQ

    Amazing flow and use of words and excellent concept :) and that for a 14-year old lol anyways i loved it :) i give it a 5/5

    ~StefQ

  • 17 years ago

    by katie!

    Incredibly inspirational and thoughtful poem, interesting the way you incorporated the story, An intelligient and inspiring piece

    "I'm not going to save the world,
    I'm going to change it!"

    If only we all thought like this..

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    "If I can not touch everyone,

    Cannot should be one word. Also, the 5th stanza lost the flow a little with shorter lines . . .

    However, awesome poem - I'm sure loads of people on this site could relate.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by azlan26

    Wow the last two lines were a powerful message, noone can save the World as such...but everyone can change it in their own special way :)
    I thought the whole poem was excellent, well thought out and well set out
    Great stuff :)

  • 17 years ago

    by uNfOrGiVeNsiN335

    Excellent poem. Definatly going to be a writter! no doubt.

  • 17 years ago

    by jamie ellen

    The flow was strong and it was very inspirational, without being cheesy a few very good lines in their that really stand out well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Spammy

    Wow ! awesome poem very VERY nice. :] hahah it really inspires me to write more poems

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This is really good the flow was perfect & the rhyme scheme worked well. I really like the meaning behind it as well as everything else. Great job on this! 5/5*

  • 17 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Hey, all the best forever, just dont let that dream fade away, u really got the talent for sure
    5/5

    take care

  • 17 years ago

    by Holly

    Wow you're wicked good. Thanx for the comment on mine by the way but damn! You have a lot of comments like u need mine, but you're really good keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by ATLbabe

    WoW ThAt WaS PrETtY DeEp I LoVeD It ...i know it gave me goose-bumps too lol

  • Loved it!!! Wouldnt change a thing!!! Great job!! 5/5!! Thanks for entering my contest!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow.. that was inspriational! i loved itt! it was amazing! keep up the excellent work, and we will all keep coming back! :)
    jessy

  • 17 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Gr8 poem...makes u think. lovd it..5/5
    ~*Who Cares?*~

  • 17 years ago

    by Lisa

    Really really love this poem a lot...there is something different about this poem compared to tohers that I have read o the site...loved it....and I noticed you entered it in a comp as well hehe....nice job.

  • This is awesome! i REALLY love the ending! wow! great job!
    Xoox molly