Pretty awesome poem! I liked it ...keep it up!

Great. But at the end of the poem, you could have added a last touch. I felt like the end was missing something. A little touch at the end. Other than that, Wow!

I liked the ideas your poem wastrying to display, but the way your presented it was rather disappointing in my opinion... It lacked rhythm in some places (i have trouble with that too though >_

Nice poem... GJ! :D

Great job..keep it up!

I cant explain how gr8 it is satan would be proud and so i am keep ur works up or maybe ur real life cuz it seems true

Great vivid imagery ... a different type of write!

Woww greattt ,so different , loved reading it .

Wow gr8 poem, loveed it. 5/5! nice detail and stuff!

This is really diffrent than what I am use to seeing from you. It is very good. You have really turned your writing in a very new direction. Excellent job!