Becoming a daddy (its just a poem)

by Alex in heaven   May 8, 2006


Can't believe I'm about to have a new relative
Well, the doctor called and said your test was positive
This is what I want
This is my dream
I need to buy the baby some jewelery
No more sleep, it will become more noisy
I'm scared,excited but it should be lovely.

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  • 17 years ago

    by johnnys_princess

    Good effort but try adding some more emotion much luv lynne

  • 17 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    This is a rather weak poem. It has hope, it just needs some work. The jewelry statement is completly irrealevant. The last two lines are the best, they show an emotion and explanation. Try and mimick this in the other lines.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jenn

    Ohh I like that! But..buy the baby jewelry? Hmm...well I certainly don't think the poem deserves a whole rating of 2.1!

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