Ohh I like that! But..buy the baby jewelry? Hmm...well I certainly don't think the poem deserves a whole rating of 2.1!

This is a rather weak poem. It has hope, it just needs some work. The jewelry statement is completly irrealevant. The last two lines are the best, they show an emotion and explanation. Try and mimick this in the other lines.

[PygmyPuff]

Good effort but try adding some more emotion much luv lynne