Comments : A place in Heaven for the Fallen

  • 11 years ago

    by Candice

    Wow, this is an amazing poem! 5/5 Great Job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Emi

    I like it, it tells a very nice story.

  • 11 years ago

    by amber

    I love this poem, i love how it tells a story and you can actually see him hiding underneath the tree. I love how you made what the angels say rhyme as much as it meant something, some people don't have that ability...it's really hard to do that, i know, but its a great poem, i love it....good job 5/5 all they way
    check me out sometime
    ~*~Amber~*~

  • 11 years ago

    by Nada

    Wowwww this is really long but nicely written

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Long- but equally good. If you know what I mean. ^_^

    Thanks for the comment

    Happy Writing
    Hannah-

  • 11 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    You're really good at story poems..i cant right anything that long..lol it gets so boring. you are just amazing. 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    And may that fiendish woman burn in Hell along with her mortal kiss!”
    ((My favorite lines..))
    His body was weak for he didn’t feed since he was made
    ((This is poor grammar here...))
    he said with crimson tears in his eyes.
    ((TOO cliche for you, my dear. You're a better writer than that.))

    I liked this. But, all your stories seem to be about the same thing and that gets kind of boring. I've read two so far that are the same... Change around a bit. (If you do, horray, I'm only suggesting.) Nice write, the flow was much better here.

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    I really love this poem.. but some lines are kina long. and dont flow as well as others.. but still i love it and the whole idea of it.. its wonderful!

  • 10 years ago

    by Bridget

    I think this is a very clever idea you used here, and i really enjoyed reading it although it kinda dragged on for a bit long. don't worry though it was great! you had good rhyming, and none of the rhymes seemed like they were just put there so they would rhyme. Some of the things you said were really clever, and made me imagine the scene vivdly. Well done 5/5 :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    This is such a unique beautiful peace. Really captured my eye, and I just had to keep reading.

    +.+ Another [crystal] tear |falls|....+.+

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Very visual and descriptive. And very good rhyming. Keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this.
    The imagery you portrayed in this piece was breathtaking, it creates some very vivid pictures.
    The flow is perfect throughout the entire piece and I loved your rhyme scheme.
    While somewhat long, you held my attention throughout the entire piece...beautiful work on this.

  • 10 years ago

    by ashley

    This poem reminds me of one of my friends poems.....i like it very much hope to read more

  • 6 years ago

    by Jaymi Lynn

    Your poem has the perfect ending of a beautiful nightmare. I loved it!

  • 6 years ago

    by Jaymi Lynn

    Your poem has the perfect ending of a beautiful nightmare. I loved it!