Comments : Fighting darkness

  • 11 years ago

    by Vampire Bunny

    Wow this peom is great! I sent it to a friend of mine that is going through a really hard time and she started to cry!!

  • Wow!! Great write!!One of the best poems that i have read!! Fantastic!!! Im sorry if your going through this!! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Wow thank you, not sure what to say really.
    thank you
    5/5
    Emma

  • 11 years ago

    by Cayce

    WOW! great poem! Very inspirational! I loved it! You have a lot of talent! Keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Kaylee

    The reason I really don't like friendship poems here are because they usually feel awkward and don't really give the readers an explaination or not a detailed one. I know readers can fill in the gaps and that poetry has no set rules, which makes it fun!, but maybe explain why this "friend" is in this darkness or exactly what is the light you see. It's a pretty good poem, don't get me wrong, I'm just throwing out suggestions. I did think the repetition was nice and not too over done and that if this is true then you're trying to lift someone's spirits.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jen

    "You may think you've lost to darkness
    But I can see the light in you
    You may feel like giving up
    But I know you can make it through" thats definately my favorite part of the poem. your a good writer keep up the good work :) i can see your point of veiw in this poem definately.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jen

    PS. in reguards to your post on the discussion board could you checkout/comment a couple of my poems? thanx

  • 11 years ago

    by Always4You

    Wow really really good!! great job keep up the good work!!

  • 11 years ago

    by J Lau

    Encouring poem... Nicely written and supportive. Great write. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by David Marshall

    Thats really good, i like thr hope u have in who ever your writing about...it also kinda sounds like the form of a song...thats cool, nice poem 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    This really meant alot to me. I could relate in every way. This is exactly how I feel about my two best friends, Who helped me through alot, And now there not doing too good.

    You did an awesome job on this piece. Nothing I would change. Keep it up!! 5/5

    `taleeee xx

  • 11 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Thats really beautifull!! great work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I love this poem, that's what friendship is about, telling your friend that eventually everything will be ok. I love the whole message that you gave and the title is interesting and original.
    Great job! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I love this poem. I can relate to it rather well, adn I thought the flow and such was perfect. I loved the second Stanza the most though. =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Kim

    THis poem was so sweet, and even inspirational. It shows the reader that yes YOU can get through it because there is someone there to help you. I think it would have been even more effecctive if you elaborated a bit on the story behind it. Tell a bit about the friends porblems and how they can get through them.
    Still it is a very touching poem, and has the potenetial to be very amazing!!! Good luck ;)

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    This poem had a sadness to it however it was also very inspirational.
    I can really relate as I have friends who are going through the same thing and I would do anything to be there for them in their time of need.
    I like how you repeated that one stanza as it was not over done.
    I also like the flow and the rhymes did not sound forced. Great write!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Wow this poem was very very well wriitennn... well penned ;)

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. i really like this poem.. its very optimistic.. i like that .. the only thing is that a few lines dont flow as well as the rest.. but dont worry i get that problem all the time.. but i still think its a really great poem.. i like it a lot.. great job!!

    and if get a chance maybe you can check out some of my poems =)

  • 9 years ago

    by HvN

    Nice flow, great ryme! Love it! 5/5