The reason I really don't like friendship poems here are because they usually feel awkward and don't really give the readers an explaination or not a detailed one. I know readers can fill in the gaps and that poetry has no set rules, which makes it fun!, but maybe explain why this "friend" is in this darkness or exactly what is the light you see. It's a pretty good poem, don't get me wrong, I'm just throwing out suggestions. I did think the repetition was nice and not too over done and that if this is true then you're trying to lift someone's spirits.
"You may think you've lost to darkness
But I can see the light in you
You may feel like giving up
But I know you can make it through" thats definately my favorite part of the poem. your a good writer keep up the good work :) i can see your point of veiw in this poem definately.
I love this poem, that's what friendship is about, telling your friend that eventually everything will be ok. I love the whole message that you gave and the title is interesting and original.
Great job! 5/5
THis poem was so sweet, and even inspirational. It shows the reader that yes YOU can get through it because there is someone there to help you. I think it would have been even more effecctive if you elaborated a bit on the story behind it. Tell a bit about the friends porblems and how they can get through them.
Still it is a very touching poem, and has the potenetial to be very amazing!!! Good luck ;)
This poem had a sadness to it however it was also very inspirational.
I can really relate as I have friends who are going through the same thing and I would do anything to be there for them in their time of need.
I like how you repeated that one stanza as it was not over done.
I also like the flow and the rhymes did not sound forced. Great write!!
11 years ago
by Robie Lincer
Wow this poem was very very well wriitennn... well penned ;)
Wow.. i really like this poem.. its very optimistic.. i like that .. the only thing is that a few lines dont flow as well as the rest.. but dont worry i get that problem all the time.. but i still think its a really great poem.. i like it a lot.. great job!!
and if get a chance maybe you can check out some of my poems =)