Comments : And You Think I'm Happy

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Really good poem. I liked the ending. It finished the poem just right. Nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow.. that was a perfect ending to a very emotionally powerful poem! great job.. if your poems are all true then that is very sad.. and if you ever need to tlk im here :)
    jessy xox

  • 17 years ago

    by Richard

    Aweh this poem is sad

    *hugs* keep your chin up

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Very powerfully written peice, the repitition really enforcied the point which you were making and the descriptions adn clearity of the plot really added to it's overall power.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Really powerful poem though it would have been nice to know emotionally how the speaker was feeling. Hope it's not true.

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Yesh. I loved this. A set a good message in this poem. And it's sad how people can't see the signs of being unhappy. Really awesome write you have here. I loved it. Keep it up! 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 17 years ago

    by shadowlight

    I like the reptition in this peice it is very effective adding really power and feeling to the poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychil

    Nice job in this poem. It was strong and there was a lot of emotion in it. WOnderful repetition in your lines as well. Great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by VSambulance

    Wow... like it alot..
    the way you make the situtations and end with "and you think i'm happy" i've had this happen alot.. haha.. nice work!!

  • Great poem i love the ending!!! i like how you gave the situation and then asked "and you think im happy." Its one of the better poem i have read latetly!!! 5/5!! Keep it up!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Awww.
    thats sad.
    good poem though.
    its a different style.
    i like it.
    ~Emah

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Wow! that was very sad..but also very great! it was full of meaningful emotions..you expressed your thoughts beautifully! i loved it 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Very powerful, and very VERY well set out. i love the repetition on "and you think i'm happy?" then the slight change but teh same thing at the end. very effective. i loved it completely. very moving

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Awww.. this is so sad. I love the way that you changed the last line in the last stanza, it gave it a great affect. But you did a great job on this. You described everything so well and the repetition of the last line really worked well for this. Great job! 5/5 Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Wow-this poem has a great level of depth and emotion! I love the repitition of ''And you think I'm happy?'' at the end of the stanzas--Great write--5/5

    Stay Strong----

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Sad. You really bring out lots of emotion in the poem. Great work.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Very nice job... You captured such an emotion that most can't. Excellent job.

    xDarkSuicidex

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    This is just so sad. I like the way your stanzas are phrased to 'speak out' it's like you are talking to someone.

    I just lost my mom
    She died in a car crash
    And you think I'm happy?

    these lines really stood out as I didn't really know where the poem was going.
    I loved the final stanza too. The whole thing is so heartfelt and angry I don't know what else to say.

  • 17 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Aww...hun...i'm so sorry your mom died...that really sucks...then to add more to it you live with you father...and he beats you...after all you've been through?! i'm so sorry...ya know...my life might be bad right now...but at least i'm not physically abused...stay strong hun..

  • Wow, i Must Say That Was Amazing, It Was Really Deep, And You Had A Good use Of Words, Way To Go!!
    5/5
    -Stephanie
    lol thanx for the advise on my poem!