Normally I'll just give positive comments for commenting on mine, but I actually quite like this.
I like the imagery you've created here. In fact, I've just had to read this three times to really get a feel for it. It's poignant, but with a lot of passion embedded in the words. Keep writing like this and you'll go far. x

Oh... how the truth hurts so. A pain we have all become a victim of. Wonderfully conveyed, beautifully written. Truth written so truthfully :)

Very excellent abstract details. Great originality such as "It claimed sinners out of lovers,"

Keep it up

Yes indeed, the cold hard truth can be extremely painful, but it is still there. I liked the discriptions you used, the similes and imagery were unique and really made this poem for me. Just as a comment, in your profile it says that you say that you tell people you are bad at poetry because you aren't as good as you want to be. Well, here is a bit of truth for you to concider. When you allow yourself to be labeled, even if the labeling is done by your own self, then you will live up (or in this case down) to that label. I mean, I understand not being as gifted in an area as you want to be, just be careful that in your accknowledgement of that, you don't in turn limit your abilities. Hugs lovely.

-Tainted

I really enjoyed this poem!!! The truth hurts!! I thought you wrote it very beautifully!! The flow was good!! 5/5

I love this poem and as everyone says, the truth does hurt. It flows well though and it made sense. I tend to love the short flowy poems alot. ^^

"Yet mirrored kinder reflections."

The last of the first stanza is outstading - I think it speaks the truth of the entire poem - this person who is undergoing it all and yet reveals a softer side.

the imagery you have evoked through the poem is admirable.

an excellent piece of work.

love and peace
shobhana

I sensed an attack on religion in this poem- perhaps just my interpretation. It seemed to address with subtlety many different issues. The poem in itself was well written, I sense a great deal of thought was put into it. It felt more critical if not somewhat angry than sad. Every line had its place- another great poem on a unique topic. I would have liked for it to be a bit longer personally....still excellent poem.

[lost_laureate]

Attack on religion? I did not see that. I saw a poem with vision. Images that jumped out at me. Confusion and misunderstandings. This was a really good poem. Keep on writing.

So well written! I love the opening two lines, definately caught my attention.. Excellent use of language and personally I like the length of this poem. You conveyed your feelings perfectly...

Amazing use of diction. Original descriptions ooze from this poem, and with meaning too.
The flow was spot on, I didn't stumble at all, which is is hard to do with this format and non rhyming.
Well done, and thanks for the comment on my poem.

Hey that poem was amazing to read. You expressed yourself well and the flow was great. Keep up the great work and thankyou so so much for reading my poem :)

Very nice poem..Outstanding imagery..it has a nice flow and a lot of meaning to it..You've got some talent..so keep writing..

5/5

Great peice with some fantastic iagry and descriptions, it seems to incorperate many themes in very few words very effectively-i read it several times and interprted it slightly differently on each read lol.

it flows very well anfd the ideas seem to fuse seemlessly thoughout to make a wonderfully deep and effective peice of writting.

5/5

The wording in this is amazing

to good for me

5/5

i loved it the flow and everythign
your very talented i couldnt realyl say wats its about but look amazing

And yet another great poem by you.. You did a great job on this. The flow and the rhythm of it was perfect and you had great word usage. The similies that you used really worked well for this and I love the concept of the poem. Great job on this. I loved it!

Short yet powerful... hard to grasp at first, but after reading it through a couple of times, it becomes clear. Great write. 5/5

Great poem! I love how you take such a widely known topic and portray it so uniquely through your words, I wish I could write half as good. Keep it up. 5/5

Wow.. that was DEFINETELY a five.. that was so good.. your choice of words was amazing and it flowed so well.. keep up the brilliant work!! 5/5
jessy xox

I liked that a lot!! I liked the way you wrote it and everything..>Great job Kaylee!!