Comments : A cold, black night..

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I loved the words you used to describe the night and the memories, it's amazing how I imagined the whole story.
    The story is really sweet and sad, and I loved that the place was a bridge, so romantic.

    Great job! 5/5
    Keep writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna Balkin

    So glad to see that this poem gave you recognition! It is an awesome poem and I thankyou for entering it in my competition :)
    I'll let you know how things go, and I owe you 4 comments so far...2 for entering, and 2 for using the title!!
    Well done!!
    Jen X

  • 17 years ago

    by Cherri

    Very beautiful peice dear. Also sad in a way. Love is nothing to waste, or forget, it always stays in your heart, even after they are long gone. You told it well. please keep writing more for me to read hun. take care

  • 17 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Wow jessy that was amazing! So sad but so wonderful! You improved soooo much! This one definatly NEEDS to be on the top poems list! Wow, You amaze me girl! My faverotist person my faverotes list lol! I really liked this line!

    The mist surrounded them
    Like a silvery shawl

    Keep writting darling

    Much love
    Brigitte

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Awh. I think I need a tissue. I loved this poem the flow and everything it kept you guessing like at frist I thought he was leaving her or something then it turned out he head cancer.. I loved it. *Tear* Great Write.

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Such a heartbreaking poem, and so very touching. I liked your use of descriptions especially in the lines you repeated.
    I did find it a little long winded leading up to you writing what he actually said to her, but I suppose you did that for effect.
    Good write.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cagil

    This poem is damn romantic and sad!! why do you always have to make sad poems????huh!! I LOVE YOUR POEM!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Emma

    That was really just amazing...i loved it...it worked so well...i loved it...i think i starting crying at a point in time....i am just simply amazed...Great write...
    Emma 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by J Lau

    Wow... This poem is so sad and emotional. You did a great job in portraying the feelings and pain of loosing a loved one. I loved the way you broken down the stanzas and the use of the freestyle. Great write! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jen

    Wow... im speachless... it started out a little slow and then... just holy crap. wow. i had tears in my eyes. this is one of the few poems ive read that actually made me cry... your a very talented writer... i wouldnt make any changes... normally i prefer poems that rhyme... but honestly you blew me away on this. way to go. -Jen- PS. Im sorry if this is a true story... deeply sorry.

  • 17 years ago

    by Ye Seul

    Heyyy jessy~~ this is wonderful piece!! i was almost crying when he says "it will be all right " and so on.. well done and love it really~ nice job on that too!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by vika

    Nice poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    Such a srong poem, i loved the words you chose and a really strong ending.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jen

    Well... you asked me to comment on this one... yet i have already commented on it once before.. It blew me away the first time i read it... if i could vote again i would give you another 5/5 :D -Jen-

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Another absolutely amazing poem, i really love reading your poems, they are so unique, so well written and expressive. i lived this one as much as the others i have read.
    keep writing my friend
    xxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    I'm seriously... speechless. That was great.. but very sad. I could feel my heart breaking along with the girl in this poem.. I sincerely hope it's not true.

    Great write though. Keep it up!