Comments : Please Lie (Lyrics)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow! another excellent poem! this was a bit unexpected, since you wouldn't really want anyone to lie to you.. but i can really see your side of the story.. i think this would make an amazing song and i cant wait to hear it! :P lol.. just one little problem as far as i can see ::

    Sine you sat down,
    ^ in this line, i think you meant to write "since" not "sine"

    :) nice work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Joyo

    Hey you, I write a lot of lyrics, and this one is not too long. I like that you say/write your words without any problems of being trapped in this endless rhymewriting. If you only write rhymes, It's very difficult to express your words perfectly. (Not that I don't doubt you could write it perfect also with rhymes ;P. ) I liked it a lot. keep up the good work! ;) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    I write lyrics and this sound really good. To me it truly does. And I'm sorry about this. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Belle

    I like this, you are an amaizing song writer.

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I like this a lot...cuz I too write lyrics. This was really good. If you want to edit, here's my idea for the last part you have...

    I wasn't ready for your confession
    'Cause I don't want to face my own
    I'm still not ready to leave you
    'Cause I can't picture me alone

    Hope this helps! Great job though! Jpoet*

  • 17 years ago

    by most perfect lie

    It is great, very truthful great point about the wanting of a lie sometimes it is easier to take than the truth. I would suggest not cutting anything out from it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Rocky

    I can really relate to this poem. i understand just how you felt

  • 17 years ago

    by DarkPoetess

    I understabd exactly where you're coming from. recently had my heart broken by someone who i knew never would, and it's hard when you can see it coming. great poem 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    More great lyrics from you....i really like it.. and its tough having someone cheat on you... i've been there and it sucks... good job on this.

  • 16 years ago

    by Maddyxxx

    Got a 5/5 from me, I like it. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Polaroid

    I'm not a lyricist, but the poem part of it was really great. And ya it would sound alot better with music
    gets me wondering what the tune is :P

    polaroid