This is a lovely write. Your words are deep and powerful. Warm and tantilising! Great work. Just a few things (An opinion);

Desirable sultry heart - This is only 7 syllables, and should be 8. This is a great line, just needs a slight tweak.

Elegant caresses deep within soul - I don't feel like this line fits too well, perhaps it's just me. Maybe you can tweak it to sound a little better? Sticking to the 10 syllables required for this line.

This sweet awaking in me - You need to change awaking to awakening, that way it fits the 8 syllables for this line as well as fitting nicely.

^^^ Beautiful rictameter, Kaylee! Very nicely done...

*It seems you've missed the word "shocking" for the challenge...

Kaylee.... WOW!! You edited it. I love your changes. You really converted the 4th line, it's now absolutely fantastic. A truly adore this write. Your talent comes alive with this one. Well done!!!!!!

Awh. This poem is so sweet. I absolutely adore it. I agree with Simon about how deep and powerful it was. It was just perfect. Great Job!!

Warm, passionate and very well worded.

excellent as usual.

good luck and peace
shobhana

Keep it up

Keep it up

Keep it up

Wow thats really good

Wow, is that start and ending made up? it was a really meaning full poem.