This a beautiful poem, I LOVE it!!

xoxoxo Haley

Hey brigitte that is a great poem I liked it alot!!

Much Love,
Marlena

This was really good. The way you worded it was beautiful. You did a really great job with this piece. I loved it, Honestly. Keep it up. 5/5

`taleeee xx

I love the passion and emotin in the poem and thwe talk of screaming into the pouring rain is a lovely image xxALLYxx

^ I agree with the above posts. This is a beautiful poem, with good structure and rhyming. I have no complaints really :) x

WOW! this has to be the best poem i have EVER read! wowwwww.. i ADORED this.. it was so beautiful, and amazzinngglyy worded! wow, wow, wow.. BRILLIANT poem! keep writing more like thiss, it was just so great.. 10/5! lots of love! xox

WOW. This was fantastic! I loved it!! You worded it so well. And the rhyme scheme you uses, AABB can be pretty hard to pull off without making the rhymes sound forced. And, You did a really good job on that. I loved this. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

"Tis’ the blazing suns sole defeat"
you need an apostrophe in "sun's", ownership.
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"But to no avail, but this heartless pain"
I didn't like the repitition of 'but' so close together. I'd try to omit one.
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"Reminding me of your depart"
depart is not a noun, departure is. That would mess up the rhyme scheme though. I'd suggest restructuring the sentence to something more like:
"Reminding me of how you'd depart"
or something.
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"With whats left of my fiery passions aflame"
"what's" needs an apostrophe, contraction
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"These earth bound tears I forever cry"
earth-bound should be hypenated, it is a phrase
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"Crystal bullets kiss a tear stained face"
same goes for tear-stained
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I really really enjoyed that piece! The imagery and metaphors were great, and I thought that the story behind the imagery was as enticing as the way you told it. It's too bad it had to be so mysterious though, I would have liked to have read more about the circumstances involved.

There is a lot of imagery in this poem, almost like a movie, but I can feel the pain the speaker is feeling. You have great descriptions and metaphors, and it flowed very nicely - very well done and worth the read.

This is sad, but very well done. You did a good job of not going straight to cliches, as is what tends to happen when one is writing about such a subject. It flowed really well and I like the choice of words. =]

The descriptions and imagery in this poem are excellent. They drew me in and again kept my attnetion. The hryming was good nad didnt seem to be ofrced at any point of the poem. Il ike the "crystal bullets" and other description, it really helped create a wonderful image. The flow of the poem was good it was penned brilliantly. And it was really really enjoyable! To improve once more i suggest you use punctuatiion but otther then an amazing read! keep them up! xx

What a strong amazing poem.. WOW..I really liked the title..Great description and wording..The flow was great but would've been even better if you had used punctuation.. This poem kept my attention..(the title grabbed it).. Great job hun keep writting..I'm adding you to my fav's! 5/5
Tyanna