I love that last line 'i'm lost inside'. And also the 'i'm covered in sweat, but i'm cold inside'. They are very erm i suppose the word is moving but its not really what i mean. Those words stand out and they really effect the reader - or me at least. Its a good poem. Thank you for your comments.

Jemma

Thank you so much for the comment. that was my favorite part actually! haha . hey do you know why theres a one on the side of the three for my comments. the one is in red. does that mean the person didnt like the poem?

I really like how u ended the poem. you ended it so hat the reader was just like oh. like they get it...i loved that poem

xoxo

I like this a lot its really good :D

i wub you amanda!!!

I like this a lot its really good :D

i wub you amanda!!!

Awww haha ima add you too! haha. gosh im so unsmart with this stuff. im still learning how to work it all.

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Awww haha ima add you too! haha. gosh im so unsmart with this stuff. im still learning how to work it all.

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