I can feel the emotions and sadness of not having the support you desire. Follow your dreams... never give up. One minor thing though... "your taking away" should be "you're taking away". Good write though. 5/5

^^^i agree.
i can feel the sadness and longing as i read it

good effort 5/5

Oh wow! Holy moly...a lot of emotion in this poem. Very well penned. 5/5 :)
-Jenna xo

"I'm gonna work hard to get the cream." that was the only line that bothered me, the cream isn't really a term I've heard used exactly that way, I guess the context you could be using is like the cream of the crop, or maybe even just referencing something sweet, some goal, iono.

Besides that I really liked the poem, and thought the rhyming didn't obscure the message.

"I'm gonna work hard to get the cream." that phrase was a lil' wierd for me.. but other than that it was a very nice poem....your a reallt nice writter!

Hey good poem,
flow 5/5
voice 5/5
vocab 5/5
you 15/15
15/3=5
5/5
good job
>>MIA

I really havent read anything like this before, great theme and i could sense ur dedication here, keep it up...lovely poem

all the best and take care
5/5

Wow this poem is really good, I can feel your emotions and your love for dancing. I only wish I could have something like that, well that was healthy anyway. I hope you continue your dream and become an amazing famous dancer. 5/5

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Wow another great poem.....keep up the great writing....and never let ppl get down on your dreams easily 5/5

Any poem with dancing in it, Im there..just brilliant in its desription, thanx for your comments on mine, its appreciated. Timothy r

Wow! I know you are an awesome poet, i love all of your work and this poem was breathtaking, it was so well written and absolutely lovely to read.
keep writing
xxx

This is amazing. I sincerely hope you go for your dream.. I can relate to this, except for the dancing part, even though I love it.. but seriously, don't let anyone else get in the way of you and your dream. Go for it no matter what! I sincerely love this poem. It had a good message to it. I think it could also go in the inspirational poem category as well. Great job, keep it up!
Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy =)

Amazing absolutly beautiful. i love how you express your two talents in one writings poetry and dancing it was amazing i am the same way about the stage i love to act its my passion and i have had family not put the effort into support me in it i dont know if your talking about ur family or your boy but i loved it keep up the good work and never stop writing your story. keep dancing . keep writing

keep the talent keep the faith keep the abilty to write beautifully

laura

I really liked this =) i especially liked the last stanza. really good keepit up

Lotsa love
Georgi

Wow thats a great poem, its really truly powerful, and you can really read your desire to reach the dream with the support of whom ever. Hold on to your dreams, your probably an awesome dancer!

Jade

This is awesome...:) keep up the good work!
ty for the comments
BhB ♥

This is awesome...:) keep up the good work!
ty for the comments
BhB ♥

I love it, it's a beautiful poem. I liked the way you expressed your passion for dance, and how you love it.

Great job!

Awww.. that was really good! gosh, your good at so many things! lol.. poetry, dancing, singing! ur must be a very talented person :) hehe.. oo, i was the hundreath visiter to this poem.. hehe.. anyways, back to the poem.. it contained so much emotion just like all your other poems, it rhymed well, and it had a good message and was right to the point! nice write! 5/5

Woops, lol!

*u* not *ur* must be a very talented person :)