Comments : Battered Woman Syndrome

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    When push comes to shove,
    she was always facing down.
    Shouts and screams echoing,
    a gun shot puts it to silence.
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    I loved that stanza. This poem was so good. It was like really powerfull. Like.. Ommf? Lol, If that makes sense lol. But I liked this too, Just like all your other poems =P Keep it uppp! 5/5

    `Taleee xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Laura

    Very sad reality you have brought toour attention here. I believe we need that type of a defense for people do not understand the phsycological affect abuse canhave.
    However I do feel that some defense attorneys use this type of defense too leniently which I am sure would enrage the true victims if this type of abuse.
    Well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    After reading this and putting myself in the place of a battered woman and what I would do, when escape is not possible .I really think that to protect myself and my children from the reaccuring violence and battery I would do what it takes to survive . I see the deseration of these women in a much clearer light now .

    Wonderfully written piece Darien , that gives the reader much to think about .

  • 17 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Woah... Darien, this is a magnificent write. Sad, painful and shocking! You are a source of knowledge my friend and I love the way you share your knowledge through poetry. Superb work!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Somehow I felt like this poem wanted to rhyme, but never did. I think something about the way the stanzas were... maybe the rhythm... I dunno. If you made it rhyme, that'd probably make this poem flawless in my mind. As of right now though, I can't shake the feeling that it should rhyme (I don't advocate all poems rhyming, and I'm not 100% sure why I think this one should... weird). That isn't to say that this isn't a good poem, it is.

    I thought the note on the legal definition of the title was very helpful in understanding the poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by firexflys

    I love your work soooo much it's always about somthing real and thats amazing it's great work and you amazing at writing keep it up 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    A good poem is one that leaves the readers craving for more and makes them think while and after they read it. I am sure your poem will open up people's eyes, which is what a good poem should do. The writing was amazing. Wonderful Job

  • 17 years ago

    by stranger than most

    You have hit the true feelings of a battered woman to a tee and i didnt have to think to belive it as its true we really do feel like that 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Sydney

    This is a very well written poem. Nice job done...

  • 17 years ago

    by Imafae

    Very realistic, very beautifull...

  • 17 years ago

    by Sara

    This is a nice poem, especially when the moon goes into it's lunar phase when the dark moments come to point out the darkness she feels and how in the end it shines through the night, having accomplished something that has burdened it before..This piece had a strong meaning behind it and it's a very interesting piece.
    Good Luck.
    -Sara

  • 17 years ago

    by Insanelyempty

    This poem is sad but i like it. because of alcohol my moms boyfriend has beaten her for 8 years and it has finally stopped for about a year, but i still get scared when he gets mad not knowing if he is drunk again and if my mom will make it out of the hospital this time. thanks for writing this and making people think. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by vamp

    Awesome work

  • 17 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    These things Must be addressed.....what a rarity in a poetic setting....well-done and effective....Good For You!

    p.s. I think you meant..'her mind carries..........
    (no third r)

  • 17 years ago

    by ღHazel_Kittenღ

    You seem to make a lot of poetry about logical and realistic things which is a great talent. Great peom, it flowed and was VERY informational. Thank you

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Omg! sorry, lol, but i just had to laugh at you! :P

    I was 8, and she was 12 ;)

    yes, I am a woman's man..

    I was 11, and made out with my baby-sitter and she was 16. Ever since, my parents hired old ladies to babysit me. Lol, I loved being a kid.

    ^ LMAO! that is hillariouss! anyways, awesome poem! :P lol.. 5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by SN

    Wow after I read this I was speechless. I think it's really good!

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    I have an aunt in an abusive marriage and every time I hear of my uncle getting drunk and coming home and beating her, I'm waiting to hear that she finally got up the guts to shoot the bastard. This poem reminds me of all the women I've met in my life in abusive relationship - verbally or physically - and how people tend to take a lot of crap and then 'enough is enough' flip out.

  • 17 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    I did not know that!!! Wow it was good! The flow was not as good this time, some of the stuff just did not ryhme all the same is was really good your still a fav. please return the favor as said in the forum!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    I loved the repetition and slight change of the first and last stanza. it opend and closed your poem beautifuly. you really painted a picture with your words through this poem. the flow was good, which can be tricky with a non rhyming pome

    well done