I love the first stanza of your poem, it's so perfect and it made me want some raspberries. My favorite part was:

And oh, how I'd dream,
as I lay in my bed,
of those raspberry lips--
forever stained red.

Beautifully written! 5/5

Aww, that was cute! I like to read poems like this! I agree w/Lost & Delirious, thats my fave stanza too! 5/5

Very romantic ending, as usual, never thought of a topic like this.

I like it, though i dont have a lot of time to critique/comment. 'raspberry lips' seems trite,.. also the last two lines of stanza three seem to stray from the originality of the rest of the poem.. but all in all i loved the flow of this and feeling i got.

The contrast between tart and sweet was beautifully done to show the taste of one's kiss, and though I don't read love poems often, I was enjoying your description of rasberry lips. It was romantic, to me at least, and rasberies seemed to fit with the feeling I got of it actually being summer. Normally, I don' think exclaimation points should be added but that's up to you. I think it's about a very special love, wether it took place or not, and if it didn't it only means your a good enough writer to make it feel it had and if it did it means your a good enough writer to recreate it.

I'm not certain on the correct abbreviation of "until". You have "till" and I would have said it was "til" (because there is only one L in the original word).

I like how every other line in the large stanzas rhyme except for the last line of each. It took me off guard - mainly because with rhyming poetry you get in this rhythm and when it changes, it feels very abrupt.

I really like it. It makes me want to go out and eat raspberries with my boyfriend ;)

Haha, beautiful poem Sean. This one was a delight to read. Loved the opening stanza. Awesome stuff!

I love this one its sooo cute and very sweet! my fav. part is:
When can I come home
and take that journey
to the vast maple tree
where we'd feast till sick
and revel with glee?
I would hold you
and you'd whisper to me:
"Let's always meet here
and share raspberries."

loved it! 5/5

I liked it. It seemed to capture the whole summery innocense sort of feeling. anyway, good job

This was an amazing poem! I loved the desciptions you used. This was so vivd. It flowed great, and kept me wanting to read more after every line. Great job!

And oh, how I'd dream,
as I lay in my bed,
of those raspberry lips--
forever stained red.
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I loved those lines. And I was kinda upset, and this kinda made me smile =) It was really cute and sweet. There's nothing at all that I can say bad about it. You did a great job on it. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

This was beautiful also. to start with i loved the title then the poem made me smile, it just made me feel happy picturing 2 people sharing rasberries like that. and i loved the last 2 lines great ending to a great poem. Love Ally

Yay! This was a really good raspberry poem. I love the reference to the loved ones "raspberry lips." It really adds to the element of love, that is, the wonderful familiarity of someone near and dear. The imagery was good aswell, I never stopped picturing the couple sharing their raspberries. Well done.

I love the first stanza in this poem, and the image that I get in my head while reading it.

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' "Let's always meet here
and share raspberries." '

While reading the stanza that led up to this line I expected something completely different, and it kind of appeared as weak to me. BUT, at the same time it's sweet and simple, which adds to the feeling of innocent, childlike love; which I think is a wonderful affect to this kind of poem. I think it also kind of portrays the title "Raspberry Summer" which sounds just like a dream of what summer should be in the eyes of our younger self.

Does that sound as confusing as I think it does? I'm not sure, but yeah. That's all I really have to say lol.

Great Poem ;)

Beautiful poem, i love it. The longing and the passion in it are great. and it just gives an overall happy feeling, course that could just be the fact it's a love poem, or that i just left my rasberies=P it's a awesome poem =) good write

"tart but sweet,
from your raspberry lips:"
Those lines were pure brillance, I loved the comparison and the idea of raspberry lips. This was such a delightful piece of writing. It seemed wistful and reminscent and yet so soft and romantic. A tasty poem ^_^

This is real sweet.. love the imagery adn how u layed them out so clearly.. loved every single line, but my fav were the last two.. or maybe the last 4.. brings the whole poem together.. loved the title.. very attractive..

its awesome
keep up the talent
take care
NannO

Wow, have you ever experianced that mouthe dropping awe feeling after you read an amazing poem? I just got that! Your flow was amazing and I'm definatly nominating this poem for the next contest!

Awh that's so sweet. It had a great flow and was really captivating, I couldn't take my eyes off the screen!!!
Keep writing.

Pip xxx

Wonderful. Just absolutely wonderful. I really like how you take something many people don`t use very poetically, raspberries. But I really think it works in this poem. Keep up the great work, as I`m going to comment and rate some of your other new poems right now!