Amanda's Closet

by Kaylee   Jun 17, 2006


Tonight I might pray,
For a listening ear,
Behind blanket of coats,
Protection from fear,

And the bottle that breaks,
As it's dropped to the floor,
While mommy falls asleep,
I wait for her snore,

'Cause not just one demon,
Haunts my night time hours,
Murders a young girl's spirit,
As wilting summer flowers,

I believe there are miracles,
At least in my best friend,
But if I tell her my secret,
She'd never understand,

And neither would he,
When I think of my crush,
The time he splashed me,
Did he expect me to blush,

He'd made me muddy before,
But that time I was wearing a dress,
And mommy wouldn't have liked,
To have seen it a mess,

I might be just seven,
Believing the lock's an alarm,
But inside my closet,
There would be no harm,

Tonight I might pray,
For a listening ear,
Behind blanket of coats,
Protection from fear.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Good but not excellent, i like the rhyming but the rhythm is a bit rocky adn why do u have commas at the end of each line? they are unessaceary (cant spell tht!) poetry follows the same punctuation as normal literature. commas should not be used randomly.

    -biscuit-

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Wow.
    I really love this one.
    5/5
    It's so perfect I have nothing to nag about...damn
    =)
    great job
    ~Emma

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Excellent descriptions and perfect rhymes. thank you for your comment

  • 17 years ago

    by Janice

    This was good..very deep..good work..i'm glad your friend's book inspired you.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    I'd like to check out that book =)

    You seem to have captured the perfect hideaway for a child, and I love the innocense that you portray in the character. The flow was very nice and descriptions were beautiful. Nice poem.