Comments : If I

  • 11 years ago

    by Anthony Giamella

    Very good man, i wish i had the kind of creative input you have to make these poems. I like the message to, it can speak to alot of people in many different ways
    -Anthony

  • 11 years ago

    by dora

    Hey darl this was a very touching write. very well written.. great use of wrods; very meaningful. great job on this. thank u for ur comment on my work. meant alot xx
    love from
    dora

  • 11 years ago

    by Lia Jnell

    Omg that was absolutely amazing!!! You are so talented, you definatly should publish your poems!!!
    Much love
    Lia Jnell

  • 11 years ago

    by Jessica

    Woww.. i LOVED that last stanza! it was amazing.. this poem used excellent descriptions and language, and the rhymes worked, but i felt that it flowed a bit awkwardly.. but the poem itself made up for that! great write! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Heather

    I loved the poem, it was very good.

  • 11 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Hi babe, that's so beautiful, and full of expression. Definitely a 5/5 from me!
    I hope you don't mind, though, but in the line
    "If curiosity gets the best of me",
    I'd use the word "better" instead, as use of the word "best" in the same line sounds restrictive.
    Also, the line
    "The extending of a hand to others while inside they wage war",
    I'd use "whilst" instead of "while"

    Hope you don't mind me suggesting the above.. I think it may read more fluently, as Jessy commented also.. Absolutely fantastic, and awe-inspiring, though. Well done!! xx

    Thanks for my comment too. xx

  • 11 years ago

    by iheartu

    Wow...i love it!! i really enjoyed the way you wrote it, i can relate to lots of that :D also, thanks for checking out my poems, it means a lot to me!

  • 11 years ago

    by See Through Silouette

    Wow...you left me speechless. Your an amazing writer! I wish i had the kind of powerful input in my writing. Please check out more of mine, id like to hear your opinion. 2 thumbs up! xo

  • Im not a big commenter so im so sorry if i dont comment at all...no comment on this poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Beautifully Broken

    Wow i really really like this! :) thanx for the comment on my other poem 5/5

    -nicole

  • 11 years ago

    by Joy

    I liked the emotion in this, well written.

    joy*:..

  • 11 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Wow that was brilliant, the way its worded is genius. you did a reall good job and i enjoyed reading this!! keep it up! and thanks for the comment!

  • 11 years ago

    by Milla

    Wow good poem...wait scratch that its amazing.I can feel the heart you poured in it and teh depth of it to. Its a lovely piece of work.
    5/5
    keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by Milla

    Wow good poem...wait scratch that its amazing.I can feel the heart you poured in it and the depth of it to. Its a lovely piece of work.
    5/5
    keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by Smilesunshine

    Really good poem
    i really like how you have meanings in your poems they get across very well

    xo
    Nikki

  • 11 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    I enjoyed reading what you had to say. Very thought provoking and good information to ponder.

  • 11 years ago

    by samantha

    Hey. tht was a gr8! thanx 4 the comment on my poem it was lovely :) anyway gr8 poem! xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by rachelle

    Great poem. i love how the words just flow. by the way thanks for the comment. i look forward to many more of your writings.

    -chelley

  • 11 years ago

    by Somber Esprit

    Great. Very deep. I had to read it twice! I'll agree with 'RainbowSlider' on the thought provoking bit! Keep it up.

  • 11 years ago

    by Rick

    Great stuff man